Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use past tense consistently and a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details with linking words. Be concise (max 5 sentences). Also correct collocations (e.g., 'every weekend', 'when I was a child').

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it every weekend with my sister, both around our neighbourhood and into the nearby town. Because we enjoyed exploring, those rides became one of my favourite childhood activities.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence then support it with specific reasons and linking words; fix grammar and word choice (e.g., 'in my country', 'in small cities', 'in big cities you should be careful'). Mention one or two concrete examples to strengthen your answer.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in small towns where distances are short. For example, many people use bikes to commute to work or to run errands, but in large cities heavy traffic means cyclists need to be careful and wear helmets.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time marker 'when I was'. Use past simple 'had' to match the past time reference; also include the article 'a' before 'child' to be grammatically correct. Suggestion: use 'had' for past possessions and 'a child' for the noun phrase.

× I love to bike in every weekend with my sister in the city and in the town.

✓ I loved biking every weekend with my sister in the city and the town.

The context is past habitual action, so use past tense 'loved' (or 'used to love') and the gerund 'biking' after 'love' when describing activities. 'In every weekend' is incorrect; use 'every weekend' without 'in'. Also use consistent articles: 'the city and the town' or simply 'the city and town'. Suggestion: use past simple or 'used to' for past habits and 'every weekend' without 'in'.

× Yes, I think the bike is popular in my country because it's small city,

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because it's a small country,

The student used singular 'the bike' then refers to a general idea; use plural 'bikes' or 'the bicycle' with appropriate article. Also 'small city' is inconsistent with 'my country'; likely intended 'small country' or 'a small city'. Here 'a small country' fits the meaning. Include the article 'a' before 'small country'.

× but if you bike in the traffic or in the big city should be careful.

✓ but if you ride a bike in traffic or in a big city, you should be careful.

The clause lacks a subject for the modal phrase 'should be careful' and misuses 'in the traffic'. Use 'ride a bike' or 'bike' as verb followed by 'in traffic' (no 'the'), and include subject 'you' before 'should'. Add a comma before the result clause. Suggestion: 'if you ride a bike in traffic or in a big city, you should be careful.'