Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid irrelevant or unclear words (e.g., “Palin board”) and correct noun/verb forms (bicycle, for exercise). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use specific examples (when, where, how you used the bike).

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle when I was seven, which I used to ride around my neighborhood every afternoon. Because it was my first bike, I practiced daily and it helped me gain confidence and fitness.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (because, for example, also) and correct vocabulary (commute, students, exercise). Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Keep answers concise and coherent.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to commute short distances and students ride them to school. For example, I often see people cycling in the mornings for exercise or to get to work quickly and cheaply.

× I had some bicycle when I was a child.

✓ I had a bicycle when I was a child.

The student used 'some' with a countable singular noun 'bicycle'. Use the singular article 'a' for one item: 'a bicycle'. Suggestion: Use 'a' or 'an' with singular countable nouns (e.g., 'a car', 'an apple').

× My Palin board is for me for a exercise and I like it so much because it is my first time to have some.

✓ My skateboard was for exercising and I liked it very much because it was my first one.

Multiple issues: 'Palin board' seems to mean 'skateboard' (word choice). 'for me for a exercise' is incorrect word order and article ('an exercise' vs gerund). The phrase 'my first time to have some' is ungrammatical; use 'my first one' or 'my first time having one'. Also tense should match past ('was', 'liked'). Suggestion: Use correct noun ('skateboard'), use gerund 'for exercising' or 'to exercise', and express 'first one' or 'first time' (e.g., 'it was my first time having one').

× Well, definitely the bike is mostly light to the work on school and for exercise example like in the morning I want to excite exercise and I I go on my bike to go for.

✓ Well, bikes are definitely mostly used for getting to school and for exercise. For example, in the morning I want to do some exercise and I go on my bike.

Several errors: 'the bike is mostly light to the work on school' has wrong article and word choice—use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'the work on school' should be 'getting to school' or 'going to school'. 'excite exercise' is incorrect; use 'do some exercise'. Also remove duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: Use plural when making general statements about a category ('Bikes are popular'), use verbs like 'used for' and collocations like 'go to school' or 'get to work', and use 'do exercise' or 'exercise' as a verb phrase.