Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, sentence structure, and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Correct common mistakes: use past simple consistently (e.g. 'I had' or 'I used to have'), correct prepositions and articles ('in kindergarten', 'it was bought by my parents', 'my birthday present'), and use singular/plural correctly. Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

例: I used to have a pink bike when I was in kindergarten. It was bought by my parents as a birthday present, so I loved it very much. I often rode it around the neighborhood with my friends, which made my childhood very happy.

提案: Provide a clear, direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Fix grammar and word order (e.g. 'Bicycles used to be popular in Vietnam, but nowadays...'). Use specific examples of alternative transport and explain briefly how they have changed people's choices. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: Bicycles used to be very popular in Vietnam, but nowadays they are less common because of the growth of motorbikes and cars. For example, many people prefer motorbikes for speed and convenience, and urban development has made cycling less safe in busy cities.

× Yes I did, I used to have a pink bike when I swore a kindergarten.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to have a pink bike when I was at kindergarten.

The verb 'swore' is incorrect here; the correct past-tense verb is 'was' to indicate being at kindergarten. Also add punctuation and the preposition 'at' for the phrase 'at kindergarten' to be natural. Suggestion: use 'I was at kindergarten' or 'I attended kindergarten'.

× It is bought by my parents.

✓ It was bought by my parents.

The sentence describes a past action, so the passive construction must use the past tense auxiliary 'was' plus the past participle 'bought'. Using 'is bought' incorrectly places the action in the present. Suggestion: use 'It was bought by my parents' or active 'My parents bought it.'

× I really love it because this is also my birthday gifts.

✓ I really loved it because it was also my birthday gift.

Tense should match past context (use 'loved' and 'was'). 'This' is not appropriate; use 'it'. 'Gifts' is plural but refers to a single bike, so use singular 'gift'. Also adjust to past tense consistency. Suggestion: 'I really loved it because it was also my birthday gift.'

× Wow, bicycle is used to popular in my country Vietnam, but nowadays depending on the development of technologies and another means of transport instead of.

✓ Wow, bicycles used to be popular in my country, Vietnam, but nowadays, depending on technological development and other means of transport, they are less common.

Several issues: definite/zero article with 'bicycle'—use plural 'bicycles' or 'the bicycle' depending on meaning; the idiom is 'used to be popular' (not 'is used to popular'); verb tense needs past 'used to be'. 'Development of technologies' should be 'technological development'. 'Another means of transport' should be 'other means of transport'. The sentence structure was incomplete and awkward; finish with a clear clause such as 'they are less common.' Suggestion: 'Bicycles used to be popular in my country, Vietnam, but nowadays, because of technological development and other means of transport, they are less common.'