Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No and brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and word choice (e.g., “learned to ride,” “rode,” “gave me a sense of independence”). Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

例: Yes. I had a bike from about age six and I learned to ride it then. After that I often rode around the neighborhood with my friends, which helped me feel independent. Also, cycling was a relaxing and fun way to spend my afternoons.

提案: Organize your answer: give a clear opinion first, then provide two specific reasons using linking words (because, for example, therefore). Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “popular,” “infrastructure,” “public transport,” “convenient,” “environmentally friendly”). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Aim for 3–4 coherent sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because cities have many bike lanes and parking facilities. For example, people often choose bikes to avoid traffic and save money on public transport. As a result, cycling is a convenient and eco-friendly way to travel for short journeys.

× 'I had to buy when I was assigned.'

✓ 'I had to buy one when I was a child.'

'had to buy when I was assigned' is ungrammatical and uses 'assigned' incorrectly. The question asks about childhood ownership, so use past simple with a clear object and time: "had to buy one when I was a child." Suggestion: specify the noun (one/bike) and a correct time expression.'

× 'I learned it right to when I was 6.'

✓ 'I learned to ride it when I was six.'

'learned it right to' has incorrect word order and unnecessary words. Use the correct infinitive structure "learned to ride" and place the time expression after the verb. Use a numeral written as a word for small ages.'

× 'It often wrote around the neighborhood with my friends.'

✓ 'I often rode around the neighborhood with my friends.'

'wrote' is a wrong verb form (spelling error) and the adverb 'often' should precede the main verb in this simple past sentence. The correct past tense of 'ride' is 'rode.' Also use the subject 'I.'

× 'Cycling, uh, cycling gave me sense of independence.'

✓ 'Cycling gave me a sense of independence.'

'gave me sense of independence' is missing the article 'a.' Also remove the filler repetition 'uh, cycling' for clarity. The verb 'gave' is correctly past tense to match past experiences.'

× 'Relax and it's a great fun with.'

✓ 'It was relaxing and a lot of fun.'

'Relax' is a verb or adjective used incorrectly; 'it's a great fun with' is ungrammatical. Use the adjective 'relaxing' to describe the activity and the noun phrase 'a lot of fun' to express enjoyment. Keep past tense to match narrative.'

× 'Yes, you think bikes are for floor in your country yes for flowery bike is very full flower in our country because the man it is very many facilities for transport transportation transportation are very good for bikes riding and easily move and and save our trains and we.'

✓ 'Yes. Bikes are very popular in my country because there are many transportation facilities. Riding bikes is easy, convenient, and helps people save money and avoid crowded trains.'

'Original sentence has multiple issues: incorrect pronoun use ('you think'), word choice ('floor', 'flowery'), repetition, and subject-verb agreement problems. Break into clear sentences: use 'there are' for existence of facilities, plural noun agreement with 'many facilities,' and gerund 'Riding bikes' as a subject. Remove repeated and unclear words and state the benefits clearly. Keep present tense when discussing general facts.'