Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct past simple forms and natural phrasing, keep the response concise (max 3–4 sentences), and add a brief specific reason or example. Use linking words if giving extra detail. For example, say “No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of falling. As a result, I usually walked to school or rode with my friends.” This corrects ‘did not had’ to ‘didn’t have’, adds a clear reason, and includes a short consequence to enrich the answer.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of falling. As a result, I usually walked to school or rode with friends when I needed to travel farther.

提案: Make the answer more natural and specific: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (for example, “because” or “for example”). Avoid repetitive phrasing like “ride bikes” and use varied vocabulary (e.g., commute, exercise). For instance: “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute short distances and others cycle for exercise. For example, you can see cyclists on city bike lanes during rush hour and families riding in parks on weekends.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute short distances and others cycle for exercise. For example, you can see commuters on bike lanes during rush hour and families riding in parks on weekends.

× No, I did not had a bike when I was child as I was scared of falling.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was scared of falling.

The auxiliary 'did' requires the base form of the verb, so 'had' should be 'have' (Past tense issue). Also add the article 'a' before 'child' and use 'because' for a clearer cause. Suggestion: use 'did not' + base verb and remember articles before singular nouns.

× Yes, in my perspective bikes are popular in my country as I have seen a lot of people who ride bikes and travel from one place to another or even for fitness they ride bikes.

✓ Yes, from my perspective bikes are popular in my country because I have seen many people who ride bikes to travel from one place to another or even for fitness.

Use 'from my perspective' rather than 'in my perspective' (preposition choice). Replace 'as' with 'because' for clearer cause. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' in formal speech and change the phrasing 'or even for fitness they ride bikes' to 'or even for fitness' to avoid awkward word order. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('from' for perspective), choose clearer conjunctions, and simplify repetitive verbs.