Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, tense consistency, and add a brief supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one short reason or memory using a linking word.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I usually walked to friends’ houses because my family couldn't afford one, and I enjoyed playing games with them after school.

提案: Make sentences more natural and concise, use varied vocabulary and a linking word to add a specific supporting detail about why bikes are popular (e.g., cost, convenience, culture). Avoid repetition of the word “cycle.”

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, I ride mine to school every day, which saves time and money compared with taking public transport.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense ('don't have') with a past time reference ('when I was a child'). Use past tense 'didn't have' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use past simple for events or states in the past (I didn't have).

× Yes, there are many bikes popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

The original uses an awkward present construction 'there are many bikes popular', which is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is a general present-state description, so use 'bikes are popular' or 'bikes are very popular'. This puts the adjective 'popular' after the subject with the linking verb 'are'.

× I have a cycle and I go to school with my cycle.

✓ I have a bicycle and I go to school by bicycle.

Repeating 'cycle' is unnatural and 'with my cycle' is less idiomatic. Also 'cycle' as countable is fine, but native phrasing uses 'bicycle' and the common collocation for transport is 'go to school by bicycle' or 'by bike'. Use consistent noun form and idiomatic preposition 'by' for means of transport.