Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve pronunciation, avoid repetition and small hesitations, correct word choice ("bite" → "bike"), and use a clear simple structure: topic sentence + one or two specific supporting details. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words for coherence (e.g., "then", "after that", "because").

例: Yes. I had a bike as a child. At first I rode a tricycle because I couldn’t balance on a two‑wheeler, and I practiced on it for about a year. Then, when I was seven, I finally learned to ride a proper bicycle.

提案: Avoid fillers ("like", "uh") and correct grammar (e.g., "lane land for lanes" → "bike lanes", "we do" → "we have them"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 2 specific reasons with linking words ("first", "however", "for example"). Use appropriate vocabulary ("traffic", "infrastructure", "urban"/"rural").

例: Bicycles are not very popular in Thailand. First, many people prefer motorcycles and cars because they are faster in heavy traffic. Second, there is a lack of bicycle infrastructure in smaller towns, although some major cities like Bangkok and Chiang Mai have started to build bike lanes.

× I had a bite when I was a child and, uh, the first time I had a bite, it was, it was a tricycle because I couldn't ride a bicycle.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child and, uh, the first bike I had was a tricycle because I couldn't ride a bicycle.

The student wrote 'bite' instead of 'bike', which is a spelling error causing a meaningless singular noun; this fits singular/plural category because the intended noun 'bike' is singular. Replace 'a bite' with 'a bike' and simplify 'the first time I had a bite, it was, it was a tricycle' to 'the first bike I had was a tricycle' for correct noun usage and clearer structure.

× So I have to practice with that one first.

✓ So I had to practice with that one first.

The context is past (childhood), so present simple 'have to' is incorrect. This is a tense error: use past 'had to' to match the past time frame.

× And then when I was, if I remember this correctly, when I was seven years old, I, I have a bicycle.

✓ And then, if I remember correctly, when I was seven years old, I had a bicycle.

The student uses present 'have' in a past context; this is a past tense error. Change 'have' to past 'had' and streamline the phrase 'if I remember this correctly' to 'if I remember correctly' for natural speech.

× No, in Thailand we use motorcycle and cars more.

✓ No, in Thailand we use motorcycles and cars more.

Countable nouns need correct plural forms when speaking generally. 'Motorcycle' should be plural 'motorcycles'. This is a quantifier/number usage issue: make both nouns plural for parallel structure.

× Uh, it's not safe for you to bike around or like use a bicycle near like big cities and stuff because we don't have a lane land for lanes for that.

✓ Uh, it's not safe to bike or use a bicycle near big cities because we don't have bike lanes for that.

The original has redundant words ('like', 'land for lanes'), awkward phrasing and unnecessary second-person 'for you' which breaks sentence structure. This is a sentence structure error. Simplify to 'it's not safe to bike or use a bicycle near big cities' and correct 'lane land for lanes' to 'bike lanes'.

× In major cities like Bangkok or like Chiang Mai, yes, we do.

✓ In major cities like Bangkok or Chiang Mai, yes, we do.

Unnecessary repetition of 'like' and slightly disfluent structure; this is sentence structure. Remove redundant 'like' to produce a clearer sentence.

× But like in smaller cities, we don't have a bike lanes for you.

✓ But in smaller cities, we don't have bike lanes.

'a bike lanes' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'lanes' — a singular/plural error. Remove 'a' and the unnecessary 'for you' to make 'we don't have bike lanes.'

× So it's safer for you to use a motorcycle.

✓ So it's safer to use a motorcycle.

The second-person 'for you' is unnecessary and informal in this context; this is a pronoun usage/style issue. Omitting 'for you' produces a more natural general statement. If addressing the examiner directly, 'for you' is grammatically possible but redundant here.