Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep answers concise and directly structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrasing (e.g., “somehow”) and minor grammar slips (use ‘gave me’ instead of ‘brought it to me’ and ‘I’ve ever gotten’). Try to vary vocabulary (e.g., ‘present’ or ‘gift’ synonyms) and limit to 3–4 sentences to sound natural and fluent.

例: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a small red bike my parents gave me for my fifth birthday, and I rode it to visit friends and the park every weekend. That bike was my favorite possession because it helped me feel independent and active.

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and provide more specific, concrete details. Start with a clear opinion, then use linking words (e.g., ‘however’, ‘for example’) and give specific reasons or examples (statistics, city differences, infrastructure). Correct subject-verb agreement (‘not everyone is keen’, ‘most people use’). Keep to 2–3 supporting sentences and vary vocabulary (e.g., ‘popular’, ‘common’, ‘public transport’).

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, in many Ukrainian cities people prefer cars or buses because cycling infrastructure is limited and winters are harsh. However, cycling is becoming more common among younger people in big cities who care about health and the environment.

× Well, yeah, actually I did have a bicycle in my childhood.

✓ Well, yeah, I did have a bicycle when I was a child.

The phrase 'in my childhood' is not incorrect but 'when I was a child' is more natural in spoken English and matches the examer's phrasing; this is a sentence structure/style improvement rather than a strict grammatical rule. Use 'when I was a child' to avoid awkwardness and ensure clarity.

× It was almost mandatory since all the kids had either a bike or a scooter, so you had to somehow spend time with them actively and go out with your friends.

✓ It felt almost mandatory since all the kids had either a bike or a scooter, so you had to spend time outdoors with them and go out with your friends.

'It was almost mandatory' is acceptable, but 'It felt almost mandatory' is more natural. 'Somehow spend time with them actively' is awkward; 'spend time outdoors with them' is clearer. 'Go out with your friends' is fine; this correction improves natural sentence structure and word choice.

× My parents brought it to me when I was five years old, and it was the best gift I've ever got.

✓ My parents gave it to me when I was five years old, and it was the best gift I've ever received.

Use 'gave it to me' or 'bought it for me' rather than 'brought it to me' in this context. 'I've ever got' is nonstandard in formal English; use the past participle 'received' with present perfect: 'I've ever received.' This fixes verb choice and past participle usage.

× Oh, I would say they're not as popular as in European countries.

✓ Oh, I would say they're not as popular as in European countries are.

Comparisons should include the verb for clarity: 'as popular as in European countries are' or better 'as popular as in European countries' is acceptable colloquially. Adding 'are' makes the comparison grammatically explicit. This is a present tense agreement/structure clarification.

× For example, in Ukraine, not everyone are keen on sustainability and helping the environment.

✓ For example, in Ukraine, not everyone is keen on sustainability and helping the environment.

The subject 'everyone' is singular and requires the singular verb 'is' not 'are.' This is a subject-verb agreement error; always match singular indefinite pronouns with singular verbs.

× So because of that, I would say that mostly everyone use cars or buses like a usual transport for us.

✓ So because of that, I would say that most people use cars or buses as usual transport for us.

'Mostly everyone' is informal and can be improved to 'most people.' 'Everyone' is singular and would need 'uses,' but 'most people' correctly takes 'use.' 'Like a usual transport' is incorrect; use 'as usual transport' or better 'as the usual means of transport.' This fixes quantifier use and preposition/phrase choice.