Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, relevant and mostly natural. To improve further, make the response slightly more cohesive by starting with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences) and vary vocabulary (e.g., use “practice” or “play” instead of repeating “ride” or “cycling”).

例: Yes — I had a small red bike from the age of five. My parents bought it for me, and I learned to ride it in the park near our house. Because I practiced there every afternoon, I quickly became confident and often went cycling with my friends.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is slightly informal and contains grammatical issues and vague wording. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, a reason with specific evidence, and a linking word. Replace vague phrases like “random people” and correct tense usage (e.g., use present simple for general statements).

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, when I go jogging in the park each morning, I often see many people cycling for exercise or commuting, which shows bikes are widely used.

× I can say that bikes are popular in my country because every time I went on jogging every morning I kept on seeing random people cycling around the park.

✓ I can say that bikes are popular in my country because every morning when I go jogging I keep seeing people cycling around the park.

The original sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly ('went on jogging' and 'kept on seeing') while the speaker is making a general present-time statement about popularity. Use simple present for habitual actions: 'go jogging' and 'keep seeing'. Also 'went on jogging' is unnatural; use 'go jogging'. Remove unnecessary words like 'random' which is informal and not needed. Improve word order: 'every morning when I go jogging' is clearer.