Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, grammatically correct and provide one clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Correct verb forms and word order (e.g., "I had a bicycle when I was a child"). Avoid redundant words like "so definitely." Add a short specific detail about the bike (colour, how you used it) and use a linking word if you add another sentence.

例: I had a bicycle when I was a child. My mother bought it for me and I loved riding it every afternoon to visit my friends in the neighborhood.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with a specific reason and an example. Use correct plural/singular forms and avoid vague phrases like "more and more" without context. Use a linking word (e.g., "because" or "for example") and a concise result or comparison. Also use the right terms: "buses" and "the underground" or "the subway."

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in China because many people find them cheap and convenient. For example, many commuters use electric bikes to travel short distances, which reduces congestion and saves time.

× Yes, so definitely I had a bicycle when I was in child.

✓ Yes, I definitely had a bicycle when I was a child.

The original uses 'so' awkwardly and the phrase 'in child' is incorrect. Use 'I definitely had' (simple past) which matches the question about childhood, and the correct expression is 'a child' not 'in child'. Remove 'so' or place it differently for natural speech. Suggestion: Say 'Yes, I definitely had a bicycle when I was a child.'

× My mother bought it for me and I very loved it.

✓ My mother bought it for me and I loved it very much.

The adverb placement and word choice are incorrect. 'Very loved' is not natural English. Use the simple past 'I loved' to match 'bought' and place the intensifier after the verb: 'loved it very much.' Suggestion: Say 'My mother bought it for me and I loved it very much.'

× Yes, definitely. I think bicycle are more popular than the bus or the undergrounds in China because more and more people love riding the bikes.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think bicycles are more popular than buses or the underground in China because more and more people love riding bikes.

Multiple issues: noun number and article use. 'Bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' when speaking generally (singular/plural issue - ID 1 but primary is present tense/plural). 'Are' matches plural. 'The bus' should be plural 'buses' when comparing generally. 'The undergrounds' is incorrect; 'the underground' or 'the subway' (uncountable/system name) is better. Also 'riding the bikes' is unnatural; say 'riding bikes'. Ensure verb tense 'think' (present) is correct. Suggestion: Say 'I think bicycles are more popular than buses or the underground in China because more and more people love riding bikes.'