Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence plus one specific supporting detail. Use correct tense and pronouns, avoid repetition, and limit to 2–3 sentences. For example, start with a clear statement (Yes, I did) then add one concise detail (who gave it, how you used it).

例: Yes, I did. My cousin gave me her bike when I was about seven, and I used it every day to ride around the neighborhood until she bought a new one.

提案: Provide a direct answer supported by specific reasons or examples and use linking words to make it coherent. Avoid short vague replies; expand to 2–3 sentences explaining why they are or are not popular (e.g., infrastructure, culture, weather).

例: Not very popular overall. Although many people enjoy cycling for short trips and exercise, most prefer motorcycles or cars because cities lack safe bike lanes and public transport is more convenient.

× My cousin gave her bike to me when I was a small when I was a child, she gave her back to me and she bought herself another one.

✓ My cousin gave his bike to me when I was small; later he took it back and bought himself another one.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and has awkward phrasing. 'Her' refers to a female, but context implies cousin is male or at least inconsistent with 'himself/she herself'. Change pronouns to 'his' and 'he' for consistency (or use 'their'/'they' for gender-neutral). Also 'a small' is incorrect; use 'small' or 'young'. The clause structure was run-on; separate into two parts with a semicolon or period and use 'later' to clarify sequence. Suggestion: decide correct gender or use gender-neutral pronouns and avoid extra articles like 'a' before 'small'.

× My cousin gave her bike to me when I was a small when I was a child, she gave her back to me and she bought herself another one.

✓ My cousin gave his bike to me when I was small; later he gave it back and bought another one for himself.

The sentence is a run-on with repeated time phrases and incorrect pronoun references. Remove the repeated 'when I was a child' and the extra article 'a' before 'small'. Replace 'gave her back to me' with 'gave it back' since 'bike' is an object and takes 'it'. Use 'bought another one for himself' or 'bought himself another one' for natural word order. Break into two clauses to improve clarity.

× No, not really, but people like it.

✓ No, not really; people don't generally, but some people like them.

The original answer has pronoun agreement issues: 'people' is plural, so the pronoun referring to bikes should be 'them', not 'it'. Also the sentence is contradictory and unclear. To keep meaning: if bikes are not very popular overall, say 'No, not really; people don't generally, but some people like them' or 'No, not really, but some people do.' This corrects plural agreement and clarifies meaning.