Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and use a clear topic sentence. Correct verb tense and article use, and add one or two brief supporting details. Keep it natural and under five sentences. For example, start with "Yes, I had a bike when I was a child," then add when you received it or how you used it.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it as a birthday present when I was eight, and I used it to ride to school and play with friends in the neighborhood.

提案: Improve grammar, word choice and coherence. Use a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid vague phrasing like "choose to spend." Keep answer under five sentences and include one specific example or statistic if possible.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people find them affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many commuters use bicycles or motorbikes to travel to markets and work since fuel and car ownership are expensive.

× I have bike when I was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time reference. Also include the article 'a' before the countable noun 'bike'. Suggestion: use 'had' and 'a' for correct past-tense and article usage.

× I think bikes are popular in our country since this is the mode of transportation most Filipinos use in a daily basis.

✓ I think bikes are popular in our country since they are a common mode of transportation for many Filipinos.

The original uses 'this is' which mismatches the plural subject 'bikes' and contains the awkward phrase 'in a daily basis'. Use 'they are' to agree with plural 'bikes' and rephrase to 'a common mode of transportation for many Filipinos' for natural English. Also avoid 'in a daily basis'; use 'on a daily basis' or better 'daily'.

× Gas and cars are highly expensive, that's why they often choose to spend.

✓ Gas and cars are very expensive, so people often choose not to buy cars.

'Highly expensive' is unnatural; use 'very expensive'. The clause 'that's why they often choose to spend' is unclear and ungrammatical. Specify the intended meaning: if people avoid buying cars because of cost, say 'people often choose not to buy cars.' Also replace 'they' with 'people' or 'many people' for clarity and agreement.