Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, more natural and succinct. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add one short supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition and filler words.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one. However, I sometimes borrowed bikes from neighbors to ride with friends.

提案: Use consistent tense and smoother linking phrases. Begin with a direct statement about popularity, then explain reasons and contrast past and present with clear linking words. Remove hesitations and repeat words.

例: Bicycles used to be quite popular in my country because many people couldn't afford motorcycles. However, nowadays they are less common as more people can buy motorbikes and cars, especially in cities.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child because we don't have money to buy one.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because we didn't have the money to buy one.

The sentence mixes present tense ('don't have') with a past time reference ('when I was a child'). Use past tense for both the main verb and the second clause: 'didn't have'. Also use the definite article 'the' before 'money' when referring to a specific amount needed to buy a bike.

× Bicycle is indeed a popular mode of transportation back then because, uh, many people couldn't afford uh, buying motorcycle back then.

✓ Bicycles were indeed a popular mode of transportation back then because many people couldn't afford to buy motorcycles.

The original has several problems: 'Bicycle' should be plural ('Bicycles') to match general reference; the tense should be past ('were') to match 'back then'; 'couldn't afford buying motorcycle' is ungrammatical — use the infinitive 'to buy' after 'afford' and plural 'motorcycles'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× But now, uh, it is not popular.

✓ But now, they are not popular.

The pronoun and verb must agree with the plural subject 'bicycles' introduced earlier. Use 'they are' (present tense) rather than 'it is'. Also remove filler 'uh'.