Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğrudan ve anlaşılır fakat çok kısa. Daha doğal ve etkili olması için bir konu cümlesiyle başlayıp, bağlaç veya ek detaylarla (nerede, ne zaman, kimle, nasıl hissettiğiniz) zenginleştirin. Cümle sayısını 1–3 aralığında tutun, gereksiz tekrar yapmayın.

例: Yes, I did. I had a bright red bike when I was about eight, and I used to ride it to school and around my neighborhood every afternoon. It helped me feel independent and gave me a lot of confidence.

提案: Fikriniz açık ama ifadede tekrarlar ve gramer hataları var. Daha akıcı ve mantıklı bir yapı için bağlaçlar kullanın (for example, however) ve spesifik örnekler veya nedenler ekleyin. Cümleleri birleştirirken gereksiz "maybe" tekrarından kaçının.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular nationwide. In some western and southern cities they are more common, for example in coastal towns where distances are short; however, overall cycling is far less widespread than in many European countries because of limited cycling infrastructure and heavy traffic.

× I think not. Maybe the more western cities and the more southern cities maybe yes, but not like Europe. They're not that common in my country.

✓ I don't think so. Maybe in the more western cities and the more southern cities they are common, but not like in Europe. They're not that common in my country.

The original contains awkward and incorrect use of 'the more' and repetitive 'maybe'. Use 'I don't think so' for negative opinion (modal/phrasing). Use 'in the more western cities and the more southern cities' to indicate location and 'they are common' for clarity. Include 'in' before 'Europe' for correct preposition use. Suggestions: replace 'I think not' with 'I don't think so', remove duplicate 'maybe', place 'in' before locations, and reorder phrases for natural English.