Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on answering the exact question (bike) and keep the response relevant, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using appropriate past-tense forms and simple linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear verbs. For example, use ‘I had’ or ‘I didn’t have’ and follow with a short explanation (when, where, what happened).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I received it as a birthday present when I was eight and used it every day to ride to my friend’s house after school. However, after a while it became too small for me, so my parents sold it and bought a larger one.

提案: Give a direct opinion first (Yes/No/Somewhat) and support it with clear, specific reasons and examples. Use simple linking words (because, for example, so) and avoid hesitations or unclear phrases. Keep it to 2–3 short sentences and use vocabulary relevant to popularity (common, convenient, affordable, traffic, environment).

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people in small towns. For example, many students use bicycles to commute to school because they are cheap and convenient, and in some cities cycling is encouraged to reduce traffic and pollution.

× I used to have a bag when I was a child.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was a child.

The question asked about a bike, but the student said 'bag'; this is semantic error rather than grammar. However keep tense: 'used to' correctly expresses a past habit. No grammatical change needed except to match meaning: replace 'bag' with 'bike'.

× One day at primary school I left it in the schoolyard and when I came back the next day it would gone.

✓ One day at primary school I left it in the schoolyard and when I came back the next day it was gone.

The phrase 'would gone' is ungrammatical. Use past simple passive/state 'was gone' to describe its state when you returned. 'Would' + past participle is incorrect here; 'was gone' or 'had gone' are appropriate. Use 'was gone' to report the observed state.

× I think someone has told it.

✓ I think someone has taken it.

The verb 'tell' is incorrect with 'it' here. The intended meaning is that someone stole or took the bike. Use 'taken' (past participle) with present perfect 'has taken' to express that the action affected the present. 'Has told it' is semantically and grammatically wrong.

× I feel I felt really upset and reported to the old school office but we never found it.

✓ I felt really upset and reported it to the school office, but we never found it.

Mixing 'I feel I felt' duplicates tense and is incorrect; choose past 'I felt' to match the narrative. Also 'reported to the old school office' is awkward; use 'reported it to the school office'. Keep past simple 'reported' and 'never found' for consistent past narration.

× To be honest I think that by if gain popularity in the country as they are umm youthful force for student to go to school when the the under the age that they can raise or multiply or use a call.

✓ To be honest, I think bikes are becoming more popular in the country because they are an easy way for students to get to school when they are under the age to drive, and they are cheap and convenient.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: unclear fragments, wrong word order, and missing articles. 'By if gain popularity' is ungrammatical; use 'are becoming more popular' or 'have gained popularity'. 'Youthful force' is incorrect collocation; use 'a convenient/cheap way for students'. Fix pronouns and verb forms: 'they are under the age to drive' clarifies the reason. Provide clear connectors 'because' and consistent present tense for general statements.