Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the tense and make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief detail if needed. Avoid extra words. Use past tense for past experiences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a simple blue bicycle with a basket, and I rode it to school almost every day.

提案: Make the answer clearer and better organized: give a concise topic sentence, then add specific supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'inexpensive' rather than 'inconvenient') and correct grammar.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many young adults cycle for exercise and commuting, and bicycles are a cheap alternative to motorised transport for people who cannot afford motorcycles or cars.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present simple ('do have') with past time marker ('when I was a child'). Use past tense 'had' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use past tense for actions or possessions in the past (I had, I lived, I played).

× Yes, bikes are popular in our country, especially when the young adults in our new generation with the young adults, they, they actually love biking and also bike is very inconvenient to people who cannot afford tricycle when going to work.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country, especially among young adults in the new generation because they love biking. However, bikes are inconvenient for people who cannot afford a tricycle when going to work.

The original sentence is long, repetitive and has structural problems: repetition ('young adults' twice), unclear connector 'when', pronoun clutter ('they, they'), and singular/plural inconsistency ('bike is very inconvenient' vs 'people'). Break into two sentences, remove repetition, use 'among' for groups, use 'because' to show reason, and plural 'bikes are inconvenient' or 'a bike is inconvenient for people who cannot afford a tricycle'. Suggestions: keep one idea per clause, avoid repeated words, match singular/plural between subject and verb, and use clear subordinating conjunctions (because, although, however).

× also bike is very inconvenient to people who cannot afford tricycle when going to work.

✓ also bikes are very inconvenient for people who cannot afford a tricycle when going to work.

There is a mismatch and missing articles: 'bike' (singular) followed by plural 'people' is awkward; use plural 'bikes' to talk generally, and include the article 'a' before 'tricycle'. Also use 'for' rather than 'to' when expressing inconvenience for someone. Suggestion: match number between noun and verb and include necessary articles ('a tricycle').