Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, more natural and slightly longer (1–3 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief specific detail (where or how you used it). Avoid repetition. Use correct article and tense: “when I was a child.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every weekend, often racing my friends to the park. It was a simple red bicycle with a bell that I loved.

提案: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with clear, specific reasons and correct place names. Avoid confusing phrases (e.g., “my country is in Hong Kong Park” is incorrect). Use linking words (for example, because, for instance) and correct prepositions (ride bikes in/around). Keep to 1–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country because many people use them for short journeys. For example, in parks and along waterfronts people often ride bikes for exercise and commuting, especially during weekends.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun 'child'. The phrase should be 'a child'. Suggestion: include appropriate articles with singular countable nouns (e.g., 'a child', 'the child').

× I think my country is popular because my country is in Hong Kong Park, so many people ride bike in there.

✓ I think biking is popular in my country because Hong Kong Park is popular, so many people ride bikes there.

The original repeats 'my country' awkwardly and misuses pronouns and locations. 'Ride bike' is incorrect; use plural 'ride bikes' or 'go biking'. 'In there' is incorrect; use 'there'. Also the idea 'my country is in Hong Kong Park' is wrong—Hong Kong Park is inside the country, not vice versa. Suggested rewrite clarifies meaning: state that biking is popular and that many people ride bikes there. Use 'there' for location and plural 'bikes' for general activity.