Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct and more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix verb forms (use past simple), pronouns, and phrasing (e.g. “I enjoyed riding it” and “helped me explore my neighborhood”).

例: Yes, I did. My dad bought me a bicycle when I was about eight, and I enjoyed riding it a lot. For example, it helped me explore my neighborhood and visit friends more easily.

提案: Clarify and organize your points; correct vocabulary and grammar (use “bikes,” “use them,” “places,” and proper modal verbs). Begin with a direct opinion, then give two clear reasons linked with connectors (because, and, moreover). Be specific about who uses them and for what short trips.

例: Yes, I do. Bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips to work or the market, and they are inexpensive to maintain. Moreover, riding a bicycle is environmentally friendly since it does not consume fuel.

× Yes I have, my dad bought it for me when I was young and I really enjoy to riding it because it's helped me to explore the area that I live.

✓ Yes, I did. My dad bought it for me when I was young, and I really enjoyed riding it because it helped me explore the area where I lived.

Multiple tense and verb form errors: 'Yes I have' is inappropriate for a past possession context; use 'Yes, I did.' 'I really enjoy to riding it' mixes present tense with incorrect verb pattern — 'enjoy' takes a gerund, so in past narrative use 'enjoyed riding.' 'Because it's helped me' incorrectly uses present perfect; past simple 'it helped me' fits the past context. 'the area that I live' should be 'the area where I lived' to match past time reference and proper relative clause. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense when describing past events, use gerund after 'enjoy', and use 'where' for locations.

× Yes, I think buy is really popular in my country because many people could using my to get the place that not far from their home and is not consume any fuels.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country because many people can use them to go to places that are not far from their homes, and they do not consume any fuel.

This sentence contains several structural and grammar errors: 'buy' is a typo; should be 'bikes' (plural) — singular/plural and word choice. 'could using my' mixes modal, verb form and pronoun: use 'can use them' (modal + base verb + correct pronoun). 'to get the place that not far from their home' is ungrammatical — use 'to go to places that are not far from their homes.' 'is not consume any fuels' has subject-verb and noun number errors; correct to 'they do not consume any fuel.' Suggestions: use correct plural nouns for general statements, pair modals with base verbs, use plural 'homes' to match 'their', and use 'fuel' uncountable noun.