Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct verb forms, articles and time expressions (e.g. ‘in the evenings on weekends’).

例: Yes, I did. I used to ride bikes with my sister around the river and the park near our hometown. We often went in the evenings on weekends, which was relaxing and a nice way to exercise.

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Provide a clear topic sentence, then explain reasons with linking words. Use correct plural and articles, and replace unclear words (e.g. ‘lidius pollution’) with appropriate vocabulary like ‘reduce pollution’. Mention a caution with a short reason. Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular, especially in small towns because they help reduce air pollution and are cheap to use. However, in big cities you need to be careful because traffic can be dangerous and there are fewer bike lanes.

× Yes I did, I bike with my sister around my hometown river and park especially in eve in weekend.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike with my sister around the river and the park near my hometown, especially in the evenings on weekends.

Multiple issues: 1) Verb tense and word choice: 'I bike' is present simple; context asks about childhood so past habitual 'I used to ride' or 'I rode' is correct (Grammar Problem Type IDs 5 and 6). 2) Sentence structure/punctuation: run-on sentence should be split into two sentences. 3) Prepositions and articles: 'around my hometown river and park' needs articles and clearer preposition 'around the river and the park near my hometown'. 4) Time expression: 'in eve in weekend' is incorrect; use 'in the evenings on weekends'. Suggestions: use 'used to ride' for past habitual actions, split into sentences, add articles 'the', and use correct time prepositions 'in the evenings' and 'on weekends'. (Relevant types: 5, 6, 11, 17, 26).

× Yes, I think bike are popular in my country especially in small town because is lidius pollution.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially in small towns, because they cause less pollution.

Errors explained: 1) Singular/plural and subject-verb agreement: 'bike are' should be 'bikes are' (IDs 1 and 27). 2) Article and number: 'in small town' should be 'in small towns' or 'in a small town' (ID 22/1). 3) Pronoun and verb: 'because is lidius pollution' is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is that bikes produce less pollution, so use 'because they cause less pollution' (IDs 12 and 9/6). 4) Spelling: 'lidius' incorrect; use 'less' or 'lower' pollution. Suggestions: ensure plural for general statements ('bikes'), match subject and verb, use plural for general places ('small towns'), and express cause with a clear subject ('they cause less pollution').

× But if you bike in big town or in the city should be aware.

✓ But if you ride a bike in a big town or in the city, you should be careful.

Problems: 1) Verb choice and tense: use 'ride a bike' rather than 'bike' as a verb in this context for clarity (ID 8). 2) Article and number: 'big town' should be 'a big town' (ID 22). 3) Sentence structure and missing subject: the clause 'should be aware' lacks an explicit subject; include 'you' ('you should be careful') (ID 23/26). 4) Word choice: 'be aware' is acceptable but 'be careful' or 'be aware of traffic' is clearer. Suggestion: include the subject before the modal verb and use appropriate articles and clearer vocabulary for caution.