Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and add a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently and add a linking word to expand naturally. Keep responses concise (no more than 5 sentences).

例: Yes, I did. I loved riding my bike around the local park and through the quiet streets of my hometown. For example, every weekend I would cycle to the park with my friends and we often raced along the river path, which helped me build confidence and stamina.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence about popularity, then give specific reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Correct grammar (use plural/singular agreement and clearer phrasing). Add one concrete example or comparison to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in smaller towns and among students. However, in big cities they can be dangerous because of heavy traffic and many cars; for instance, I avoid cycling in downtown during rush hour and prefer public transport instead.

× Yes I did. I love to bike around the park and my hometown.

✓ Yes, I did. I loved biking around the park and my hometown.

The question asks about a past situation ('when you were a child'), so the student's main clause should be in past tense to match. 'I love' (present) is inconsistent; use past 'I loved'. Also use the gerund 'biking' after 'loved' to describe the activity. Add a comma after 'Yes' for correct punctuation.

× Yes, I think it's popular but in the city you should be careful because a lot of cars and bad traffic.

✓ Yes, I think they're popular, but in the city you should be careful because there are a lot of cars and heavy traffic.

The student says 'bikes' (plural), so the pronoun referring to them should be plural: 'they're' rather than 'it's'. The clause 'a lot of cars and bad traffic' lacks the verb 'there are' for existence — use 'there are a lot of cars'. Also 'bad traffic' is unnatural; 'heavy traffic' is the correct collocation. Add a comma before 'but' to join the clauses properly.