Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition, correct verb forms, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Use linking words (for example, 'and', 'so', 'because') and correct past tense forms: 'I had', 'I rode', 'I loved'. Be specific about routines and feelings to enrich the answer without exceeding three to four sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a black bicycle with pink handlebars, and I rode it every evening after tuition. I loved roaming around my village on it because it felt freeing and helped me visit my friends easily.

提案: Make a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words ('because', 'so', 'therefore'). Avoid repetition and fix grammar: 'travel by bike', 'easier than by car', 'you can maneuver a bike'. Provide a brief example or consequence to support your point.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are more convenient in heavy traffic. Because you can maneuver a bike through narrow gaps and park easily, many people prefer them for short journeys and commuting to work.

× It was a bicycle and it was of black colour with the pink handle over it.

✓ It was a bicycle and it was black in colour with a pink handle on it.

Use of 'of black colour' is unnatural; 'black in colour' or simply 'black' is correct. 'the pink handle' implies a specific known handle; use 'a pink handle' for introduction. 'over it' is incorrect preposition; use 'on it'. Suggestion: say 'It was black with a pink handle on it.'

× I used to rode it every day in the evening when I came back from my tuition.

✓ I used to ride it every day in the evening when I came back from my tuition.

After 'used to' the base form of the verb should be used, not the past form. 'Used to ride' indicates a past habitual action. Replace 'rode' with 'ride'. Also 'tuition' is acceptable but could be 'tutoring' if preferred.

× I love to roam around my village on my bicycle.

✓ I loved to roam around my village on my bicycle.

The question asked about childhood, so the student should use past tense to match context. 'Love' (present) conflicts with earlier past setting. Use 'loved' or 'I used to love' to indicate past habit.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because of the traffic travelling with travelling through bike is more convenient than car because as you know in the traffic the bike, you can turn bike in any direction, but the car is it's difficult.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because in heavy traffic travelling by bike is more convenient than by car. As you know, on a bike you can turn in any direction, but with a car it is difficult.

Multiple tense and structure problems: 'because of the traffic travelling with travelling through bike' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use 'in heavy traffic' and 'travelling by bike'/'by car'. Article and pronoun errors: 'turn bike' needs article or pronoun: 'turn on a bike' or 'turn on a bike' -> better 'on a bike you can turn'. 'but the car is it's difficult' is incorrect; use 'but with a car it is difficult.' Also maintain present simple for general statements about popularity.