Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Expand slightly to make the answer more natural and informative. Start with a clear topic sentence and add one or two brief supporting details (where you rode it, who taught you, or a memory). Keep it under five sentences and use a linking word if you add more than one detail.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I learned to ride it in the park near my home, and my older brother helped me practice after school. It was a simple, red bike that I used almost every day.

提案: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct. Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and one brief example. Use correct noun/verb forms (cyclists, cycling) and a linking word (for example, because, therefore). Keep to a maximum of five sentences and avoid repetition.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in Chinese cities because there are few dedicated bike lanes and traffic can be chaotic. For example, many streets force cyclists to share narrow sidewalks with pedestrians, which feels unsafe. Therefore, most people prefer cars or public transport for daily travel.

× Basically, I don't think so, because there are not many proper ways for the cyclers to to ride bikes in the city.

✓ Basically, I don't think so, because there are not many proper ways for cyclists to ride bikes in the city.

Use of the preposition 'for' with 'cyclers' is acceptable, but the main issues are word choice and redundancy. 'Cyclers' is a nonstandard form; the correct noun is 'cyclists'. Also there is a duplicated 'to to'. The phrase 'ways for cyclists to ride' is the preferred structure. Suggestion: replace 'cyclers' with 'cyclists' and remove the extra 'to'.

× It's not that comfortable to cycling for cycling in China actually.

✓ It's not that comfortable to cycle in China, actually.

The verb form is incorrect: after 'comfortable' followed by 'to' you should use the base form 'cycle' (infinitive), not the -ing form 'cycling'. Also the sentence contains an unnecessary repetition 'to cycling for cycling'. The corrected sentence uses the infinitive 'to cycle' and removes redundancy. Suggestion: use 'to cycle' after 'comfortable' or rephrase: 'Cycling in China is not very comfortable.'