Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise and add one or two specific supporting details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a reason or brief example using linking words. Avoid tense and article errors and unnecessary words.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it in primary school, so I practiced every day after class and rode with my friends around the neighborhood.

提案: Correct spelling and grammar, organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and 1–2 concise supporting details using linking words (e.g., "for example", "also"). Be specific about where and why bikes are popular and avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people cycle in my town for short trips, and in the capital city tourists and locals often use bikes to visit attractions because they are cheap and convenient.

× Yes, I used to have a bike when I was a child because I need to learn how to bike as a primary school.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike when I was a child because I needed to learn how to ride a bike in primary school.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: 'used to have' and 'when I was a child' are past, so the reason clause should be past tense 'needed' (Grammar Problem Type 6). Also 'learn how to bike' is unnatural; use the verb phrase 'learn how to ride a bike.' 'As a primary school' is incorrect preposition/ noun use; correct to 'in primary school' (Grammar Problem Type 11). Suggestions: keep consistent past tense for actions in the past, use 'ride a bike' for the activity, and use 'in' for being at school.

× Yes, I think buys are quite popular in my country because I can see many people ride a bike around the place I live and so also in the capital city where there are a lot of famous places to visit and I can see many by people start to brag around that place.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because I can see many people riding bikes around where I live and also in the capital city, where there are many famous places to visit and many people start to hang out there.

Multiple issues: 'buys' is a misspelling of 'bikes' (Grammar Problem Type 13). The verb form after 'see' describing an ongoing action should be the -ing form 'riding' (Verb + -ing form, Type 8). 'Around the place I live' is wordy; 'around where I live' is more natural (sentence structure error, Type 26). 'So also in the capital city' is awkward; use 'also in the capital city.' 'I can see many by people start to brag' contains errors: 'by people' is wrong pronoun/word order (Type 12) and 'brag around that place' is incorrect verb choice; likely intended 'hang out there' or 'go there' (Type 13 and 26). Suggestions: correct spelling, use 'riding' after 'see', simplify location phrases, and choose appropriate verbs like 'hang out' or 'visit'.