Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct tense and concise phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar: use past tense for childhood, avoid repetition, and keep it within 1–3 sentences. For example, say when you rode, how often, and one reason or memory to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle and I rode it almost every evening after school to visit my friends. I loved cycling because it helped me feel free and made it easy to explore the neighborhood.

提案: Give a clear direct opinion and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use simple, correct sentences; avoid filler words and repetitions. Use linking words (because, therefore, for example) to make your answer coherent. Mention one or two concrete reasons why bikes are or are not popular and, if possible, add an example or comparison.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars for commuting due to long distances and busy roads. For example, many workers drive to their offices since public transport can be slow, so cycling is less common in cities.

× Yes, I have a bike and I always paying with my bicycle every every every evening. Uh, yes.

✓ Yes, I had a bike and I always rode my bicycle every evening.

The question asks about a past situation ('when you were a child'), so verb tense should be past. 'Have' should be 'had' and the continuous form 'paying' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is habitual action in the past, so use the simple past 'rode'. Also remove repetitive words 'every every every' and the unnecessary 'with' before 'my bicycle'. Suggestion: use simple past for past habits: 'I had a bike and I always rode my bicycle every evening.'

× Uh, in my opinion, I don't think that bikes are popular in my country because umm, people growing up when people growing up there have there is there always have a commit, a big commitment. So maybe they are focusing on car when they want to go to work. So ya.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are not very popular in my country because when people grow up there they face big commitments. So they focus on cars when they go to work.

The original contains multiple structural and grammatical problems. Use consistent tense: general facts about the present use simple present ('are not very popular', 'grow up', 'face'). Remove redundant and broken phrases ('people growing up when people growing up there have there is there always have a commit') and replace with a clear clause 'when people grow up there they face big commitments.' 'Focusing on car' is incorrect: use 'focus on cars' (plural) or 'focus on the car' depending on meaning; here 'cars' fits generalization. Also 'when they want to go to work' can be simplified to 'when they go to work.' Suggestion: simplify ideas into clear clauses and use correct subject-verb forms.