Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details using a linking word. Avoid unnecessary articles or vague phrasing. For example, say when you had the bike, how often you rode it, or a short memory to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle from the age of seven and rode it almost every day after school. For example, I used to race with my friends in the park, which helped me become more confident and active.

提案: Answer directly and avoid irrelevant or incorrect words. Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons or examples using linking words. Replace unclear phrases (e.g. “my bank”) with relevant points like infrastructure, culture, or statistics. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because many cities have dedicated cycling lanes and flat terrain. For instance, local governments have built bike-sharing systems in major towns, so more people use bikes for short trips and exercise.

× 'Yes, I rode the bike when I was a child.'

✓ 'Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.'

'Rode the bike' is grammatically correct but sounds odd as a direct answer to "Did you have a bike when you were a child?" The question asks about possession (having a bike), so use a verb that expresses possession (have/had) rather than an action (ride). Use past simple 'had' to match the past-time reference. Suggestion: in similar contexts, choose verbs that match the question focus (possession vs activity).'},{

× 'In my country, I think so. My bank is popular in my country and there are many roads to travel here and you know, cycling is a great sport.'

✓ 'Yes, I think so. Bicycles are popular in my country. There are many roads to travel on, and cycling is a great sport.'

'My bank is popular' is likely a typo or wrong word choice: 'bank' should be 'bikes' or 'bicycles'. The original sentence is also long and unconnected. Corrections: replace 'My bank is popular in my country' with 'Bicycles are popular in my country' to state the general fact; use 'travel on' after 'roads' for correct preposition; break into shorter sentences and remove filler 'you know' for clarity. Maintain present simple to state general truths.'}]}ochemistry_notes:ignored