Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the tense consistent, use a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and keep it concise. Start with a past-tense topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words if adding extra information.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was six years old, and that summer I learned to ride it without training wheels. Because my parents lived near a quiet park, I practiced there every day and became confident within a few weeks.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (plural/singular), and provide one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague or repetitive phrases and keep sentences concise (max 5).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, many people use bikes to commute to work or school, especially in smaller towns where traffic is light.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was six years old and I learned to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was six years old and I learned to ride it.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time 'when I was six years old'. Use past tense 'had' to match the time reference. Also replace the repeated noun 'a bike' with the pronoun 'it' to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense (past) and use pronouns to refer back to previously mentioned nouns.

× Yes, bike is popular in my country because it is a daily useful for everyone but not for everyone.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because they are useful for everyday use, although not for everyone.

The original uses singular 'bike' with a general statement causing subject-verb agreement errors and unnatural phrasing. Use the plural 'bikes' with plural verb 'are' for general statements. 'daily useful' is incorrect; use 'useful for everyday use' or 'useful daily'. Replace the second 'everyone' clause with 'although not for everyone' for clarity.

× But it's very useful to ride on an easy to ride on.

✓ But they are very useful because they are easy to ride.

The phrase 'to ride on an easy to ride on' has incorrect and redundant prepositions and structure. Use a clear adjective phrase 'easy to ride' and ensure the subject matches ('they' referring to bikes). Suggestion: simplify to 'they are easy to ride' or 'because they are easy to ride' for grammatical and natural expression.