Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and relevant to the question, use a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid unrelated information. Mention whether you had a bike and give concise supporting details (what happened, when, and how). Use linking words for clarity and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

例: I didn’t have my own bike when I was very young because I had difficulty walking. After I started physiotherapy and exercising my legs for about two years, my strength improved. As a result, I learned to walk properly and then began riding a bike on my own.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, give specific reasons and a brief example, and link ideas smoothly. Correct small grammar issues and avoid vague phrases like “pretty popular” repeatedly. Mention who rides them, where they are used, and why they are popular (e.g., health, trend, transport). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Social media has boosted interest because many young people post photos of trendy fixed-gear and custom bikes. Additionally, cycling is encouraged for health and as a cheap way to commute in crowded cities.

× Well, when I was child I didn't have my own life because I couldn't walk properly and my legs were too weak.

✓ Well, when I was a child I didn't have my own life because I couldn't walk properly and my legs were too weak.

Missing the article 'a' before the singular noun 'child' is a sentence structure/ article error. Add 'a' to make 'a child'. Also this fixes subject phrase to be grammatically correct. Suggestion: include articles with singular countable nouns ('a child').

× However, I started exercising my legs and after two years I could ride bike by myself and even walk.

✓ However, I started exercising my legs and after two years I could ride a bike by myself and even walk.

The noun 'bike' is countable and in this context needs the indefinite article 'a'. This is a past-tense narrative and 'could ride a bike' is correct. Suggestion: use 'a' before singular countable nouns ('a bike').

× Well nowadays in my country bikes are pretty popular because in social media there are a lot of posts that related to bikes.

✓ Well, nowadays in my country bikes are pretty popular because on social media there are a lot of posts that are related to bikes.

Two issues: preposition use ('in social media' should be 'on social media') and missing verb 'are' in the relative clause ('posts that are related'). These are present-tense descriptions; include correct preposition and auxiliary to form the passive/participial structure. Suggestion: use 'on social media' and 'posts that are related' or 'posts related to bikes'.

× For instance, teenagers show their fixed gear bikes and also other very beautiful bikes.

✓ For instance, teenagers show their fixed-gear bikes and also other very beautiful bikes.

Hyphenation of the compound adjective 'fixed-gear' is recommended before the noun. The sentence is otherwise acceptable; ensure compound adjectives modifying a noun are connected with a hyphen for clarity. Suggestion: write 'fixed-gear bikes'.

× So our country is pretty popular with them.

✓ So bikes are pretty popular in our country.

The original sentence 'our country is pretty popular with them' is vague and implies the country is popular with 'them' (who are the bikes?). This is a sentence structure and meaning issue. The intended meaning is that bikes are popular in the country. Rephrase to 'bikes are pretty popular in our country.' Suggestion: state the subject ('bikes') and location ('in our country') clearly.