Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb tenses and remove repetition. For example, say whether you had a bike, explain why you used it (e.g. to commute to school), and give one brief specific detail (how often or a memory).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it every day to ride to school because it was faster than walking and saved me time. For example, I would cycle along a tree-lined road and often meet my friends on the way.

提案: Make a clear opinion statement, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Use natural phrasing and vary vocabulary (e.g. popular, common, convenient). Avoid short fragmented sentences; combine ideas into complete sentences using connectors like because, and, for example. Provide a concrete example or consequence.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short journeys. For example, many people use bicycles to run errands or for weekend rides in parks, and cycling is popular among students and commuters because it helps them avoid traffic and enjoy the fresh air.

× Definitely because I have to go to the school by bike and it is useful for me to go somewhere and I I could light it first.

✓ Definitely. I had to go to school by bike, and it was useful for getting around. I could ride it on my own at first.

The original sentence is long, unpunctuated and contains repeated words ('I I') and incorrect phrases ('go to the school', 'could light it'). This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Split into shorter sentences, use the correct past tense to match the question about childhood ('had to', 'was useful'), omit the unnecessary definite article before 'school' in general statements, and replace the unclear phrase 'could light it' with 'could ride it on my own' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestions: break complex ideas into separate sentences, remove repeated words, and choose verbs that fit the meaning.

× It definitely seems bicycle.

✓ Bicycles are definitely popular.

The original is ungrammatical and missing necessary words; it attempts to state popularity but lacks subject-verb agreement and noun form. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use the plural noun 'bicycles' with the verb 'are' and place the adverb 'definitely' before the adjective 'popular' to form a correct statement. Suggestion: ensure subject, verb, and complement are present and ordered correctly.

× Bicycle is easy to go to the far place or on the weekend.

✓ Bicycles make it easy to go to distant places or to travel on the weekend.

The phrase 'easy to go to the far place' is an incorrect adjective/adverb and unnatural structure (ID 13). Use 'distant' as adjective for 'places' and rephrase to show that bicycles facilitate travel ('make it easy to'). Also use plural 'bicycles' for general statements. Suggestion: use natural collocations ('distant places', 'go on the weekend' -> 'travel on the weekend').

× Ride it quickly and moves.

✓ You can ride them quickly and they move fast.

Original fragments lack proper subject-verb structure and mix imperative/third-person forms, causing a sentence structure error (ID 26). Provide an explicit subject and consistent verb forms: 'You can ride them' and 'they move fast.' Suggestion: keep subject consistent and choose matching verb forms.

× Move quickly and we can feel comfortable breeze by while riding it.

✓ They move quickly, and we can feel a comfortable breeze while riding them.

Adverb placement and article use are incorrect (ID 20). 'Move quickly' should be attached to the subject ('They move quickly'). 'Comfortable breeze' requires the article 'a'. 'By' is unnecessary before 'while riding'. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to bicycles. Suggestion: place adverbs next to the verbs they modify, include articles where needed, and avoid redundant prepositions.