Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện phát âm và ngữ pháp, trả lời ngắn gọn rõ ràng theo cấu trúc: câu chủ đề + 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ. Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi chia động từ/giới từ. Ví dụ cụ thể: nêu thời gian, ai tặng, mục đích và hoạt động kèm từ liên kết như “because” hoặc “so”.

例: Yes, I did. When I was about seven my parents bought me a bike because they believed cycling was good for my health. I used to ride it to the nearby garden every weekend, which made me feel free and helped me stay active.

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp số nhiều/đếm được, dùng từ chính xác và cấu trúc rõ ràng. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó thêm lý do cụ thể kèm liên từ như “because” hoặc “so”. Trình bày ngắn gọn, tránh từ thừa và lỗi từ vựng (‘buy’ → ‘be’).

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because it is still developing and many people cannot afford motorbikes or cars. As a result, bicycles are often used for short trips and daily commuting.

× Uh yes I did when I was to join my parents bought bought me a buy because they believe cycling was good for my health and I used to ride it to the garden every weekend which made me feel free and help help me stay active.

✓ Uh yes, I did. When I was young, my parents bought me a bike because they believed cycling was good for my health, and I used to ride it to the garden every weekend, which made me feel free and helped me stay active.

Several verbs in the sentence were in the wrong tense or form. 'Believe' should be past 'believed' to match 'bought' (past). 'Help help me stay active' is incorrect repetition and the verb should be past 'helped' to keep consistent past narration. Also 'buy' is wrong word choice; 'bike' is correct. The sentence was long and needed punctuation to separate ideas. Suggestion: keep past events in past tense, avoid repetition, and proofread for wrong word substitutions.

× Yes, I think so buy a common in my country because my country is a developing countries so many people cannot afford for a motorbike or cars.

✓ Yes, I think so. Bikes are common in my country because my country is a developing country, so many people cannot afford a motorbike or a car.

There are plural/singular mismatches and incorrect word forms. 'buy' is a typo and should be 'are'. 'a developing countries' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'countries'; use 'a developing country' (singular) to refer to the speaker's country. 'cannot afford for a motorbike or cars' is incorrect: 'afford' does not take 'for' and the parallel nouns should match number: 'a motorbike or a car'. Suggestion: ensure determiners agree with nouns (a + singular), remove unnecessary prepositions, and keep parallel structure.