Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct the age wording and past-continuous/ past-simple usage, and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I did. I learned to ride a bike when I was about seven. However, I didn’t continue practicing because my father was very overprotective and worried I might fall, so he discouraged me from riding alone.

提案: Give a slightly fuller response with a clear topic sentence and a specific reason or example. Use linking words to expand briefly and provide context (compare, give cause or example). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, definitely. Cycling is very popular among children in the Philippines because it is inexpensive and good exercise. For example, many kids ride bikes around their neighborhood or to nearby parks during weekends.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'did have' is unnecessary for a simple past affirmative sentence. In positive past statements, use the simple past form of the main verb ('had') rather than the auxiliary 'did' + base verb. Suggestion: say 'I had' for clear, natural past narration.

× I think I am seven years old at that time,

✓ I think I was seven years old at that time,

The time reference 'at that time' places the statement in the past, so the past tense 'was' should be used rather than present 'am'. Suggestion: match tense to the time reference: use 'was' for past events.

× but I wasn't able to continue learning it as my dad is overprotective when I was learning to ride a bike.

✓ but I wasn't able to continue learning it because my dad was overprotective while I was learning to ride a bike.

Mixed tenses and incorrect conjunction: 'is overprotective' is present while rest is past; 'when' is less natural than 'while' for overlapping past actions. Use past tense 'was overprotective' to match 'wasn't able' and 'was learning', and use 'because' to show reason or 'while' to show simultaneous action. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and choose 'because' (reason) or 'while' (simultaneous action).

× Yes, in the Philippines it's really one of the most popular outdoor activities for kids.

✓ Yes, in the Philippines biking is one of the most popular outdoor activities for kids.

The original sentence uses 'it's' (it is) ambiguously; specify the subject 'biking' to clarify what 'it' refers to. Also 'really' is optional but can be kept for emphasis. Suggestion: name the activity (biking/cycling) to avoid vague pronoun references.