Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and fluency. Give a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two specific supporting details (where you lived, how often you rode, a memorable moment). Reduce filler words (uh, yeah) and correct verb tense and vocabulary (use "bicycle/bike" not "buy"). Use one linking word to connect ideas (for example, "and" or "because").

例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I lived in Russia, and I rode it almost every day to visit friends. Because I loved cycling, I remember practicing tricks in the park with my older cousin.

提案: Make a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Avoid vague phrases and many fillers. Use linking words such as "however", "because" or "for example" to organize your answer. State whether bikes are generally popular and mention factors (city vs countryside, public transport, health awareness) to justify your view.

例: I think bikes are moderately popular in my country because many people use them in smaller towns and for exercise, but in big cities people prefer cars or public transport. For example, during the pandemic more people started cycling for exercise and short trips.

× Yes, yes, I have. I uh, have a buy when I'm Russia and I uh, love to uh, buy a ride a bicycle yeah.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was in Russia and I loved to ride it.

The student used incorrect pronouns and tenses. 'I have' is present; question asked about the past so use past 'I did' or 'I had'. 'I have a buy' is incorrect word choice; should be 'I had a bike'. 'I'm Russia' is wrong preposition and tense; use 'I was in Russia'. 'love to buy a ride a bicycle' is ungrammatical: intended meaning is 'loved to ride it'—use past tense 'loved' and pronoun 'it' to refer to the bike. Suggest practicing past tense forms and correct pronoun references (it for objects) and preposition 'in' for countries.

× Well, I think it's, uh, this depend on, uh, personal because, uh, in my quarantine, uh, have a, uh.

✓ Well, I think it depends on personal preference because, during my quarantine, I had one.

Multiple issues: 'this depend on' has subject-verb agreement and word choice errors; correct form is 'it depends on' (subject 'it' with third person singular verb 'depends'). 'personal' is incomplete; use 'personal preference' or 'personal circumstances'. 'in my quarantine' should be 'during my quarantine'. 'have a' should be past tense 'I had one' to match timeframe. Suggest focusing on subject-verb agreement for 'it depends', using noun phrases like 'personal preference', correct prepositions like 'during', and matching tense consistently.