Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 文法や語彙の誤りを直し、主題文→詳細の基本構造に従って簡潔で自然な応答にすることが必要です。具体的には時制（過去形）の使い方、単語の誤り（wife→bike、practice→practised/ practiced riding）、および冗長な表現の整理を行ってください。また、つなぎ語（because、so、howeverなど）を使って理由や結果を明確に示してください。例：主題文（Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.）→補足（My father bought it when I was twelve.）→具体例（I practised a lot by myself because no one in my family could teach me.）

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was twelve, and I practised riding a lot. Because no one in my family could ride, I had to teach myself, so learning was quite difficult at first.

提案: 内容を明確にし、比較表現と説明を論理的につなげる必要があります。語彙ミス（write→ride、bicycle to commute→ride bicycles to commute）や不必要な繰り返しを直してください。まず簡潔な主題文（Yes, bikes are fairly popular.）を述べ、次に比較（However, they may be less common than in some European countries.）を示し、その後具体例（In my region and among people of my religion many use bicycles for commuting）と理由や頻度を付け加えてください。つなぎ語（however、but、because、for example）を使って流れを滑らかにしましょう。

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country. However, they are probably less common than in many European countries. In my region, and among people who share my religion, a lot of people ride bicycles to commute because it is cheap and convenient.

× Yes, I have a wife when I was 12 that my father bought me and I was practice.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was 12 that my father bought me and I practiced.

The student used 'have' instead of past tense 'had' for a past time reference (past tense issue). 'Practice' is a noun or base verb; in this context the past tense verb 'practiced' is required. Also 'wife' is a likely lexical error for 'bike' but focusing on grammar: use past tense for actions in the past. Suggestion: use past tense verbs for completed past events, e.g., 'I had a bike... and I practiced a lot.'

× I practice a lot.

✓ I practiced a lot.

The sentence refers to past habitual action, so the verb should be in simple past ('practiced') rather than present simple ('practice'). Suggestion: Use 'practiced' when referring to practice that happened in the past.

× But in my family no one can.

✓ But no one in my family could.

The original 'no one can' mixes modal present with past context. The context is past ability, so use past modal 'could'. Also the word order 'in my family' is more natural earlier or after 'no one'. Suggestion: Use 'could' for past ability and place 'in my family' after or before the subject: 'No one in my family could.'

× No one could ride bikes so no one told me how to.

✓ No one could ride a bike, so no one told me how to ride.

Use singular 'a bike' for a general ability and include the verb 'ride' at the end to complete the idea. Also add 'ride' after 'how to' to indicate what skill was not taught. Suggestion: Use 'a bike' for singular reference and include the full verb phrase: 'told me how to ride.'

× Compared with the European country, not really.

✓ Compared with European countries, not really.

'European country' is singular while comparison implies the group; use plural 'countries' or 'a European country' with article. Also sentence fragment 'not really' is acceptable colloquial response but ensure the noun form is plural for general comparison. Suggestion: Say 'Compared with European countries, not really.'

× But uh, in my country and especially my religion, there are a lot of, uh, people who write, uh, bicycle to commute.

✓ But in my country, and especially among people of my religion, there are a lot of people who ride bicycles to commute.

Multiple errors: 'write' is a misused verb; the correct verb for using a bicycle is 'ride'. 'Bicycle' as a count noun should be plural when speaking generally ('bicycles') or use 'a bicycle'. The prepositional phrase 'among people of my religion' is more natural than 'my religion' alone. Suggestion: Use 'ride bicycles' or 'ride a bicycle' and 'among people of my religion' for clarity.