Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì, danh từ, đại từ) và sắp xếp câu hợp lý. Ví dụ: nói rõ bạn có hay không có xe đạp, tần suất sử dụng, và cách bạn đến trường. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản (for example, often, usually) để mạch lạc.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. When I was in primary school I usually went to school by bus or sometimes walked with my older sister. For example, we often left home at 7 a.m. and walked together if the weather was nice.

提案: Bạn nên đưa ra ý kiến rõ ràng ngay ở câu đầu (Yes/No + lý do ngắn), sau đó phát triển bằng 1–2 lý do cụ thể liên quan tới hoàn cảnh địa phương (giao thông, chi phí, văn hóa). Hạn chế lặp từ, tiếng ngắt quãng và dùng từ chính xác (popular, common, increasing). Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu. Sử dụng liên từ như because, for example, so để liên kết ý.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in small towns. Many people use bikes because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, students and market vendors often cycle to school or work instead of using a car.

× That's all. When I was a study as primary school I often do by. Go to school by bus or with some good sister for.

✓ When I was in primary school, I often walked. I went to school by bus or with my older sister.

The original contains multiple sentence structure errors: incorrect phrase 'when I was a study as primary school' should be 'when I was in primary school' (preposition and noun order). 'I often do by' is ungrammatical; context suggests 'I often walked' or 'I often went'. 'Go to school by bus or with some good sister for' mixes present and past, lacks articles and correct possessive pronoun; use 'I went to school by bus or with my older sister'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for childhood events, use correct prepositions ('in primary school'), correct pronouns ('my older sister'), and complete sentences with verbs ('I often walked' and 'I went to school...').

× But but I don't think, uh, the religious by is a most uh, is becoming, uh, increasingly combo in many parts of the world. So I think it is a much more.

✓ I don't think bicycles are primarily religious; rather, cycling is becoming increasingly common in many parts of the world. So I think it is much more popular now.

This sentence has several structural and word-choice problems: 'the religious by' is meaningless and likely a mis-speech for 'bicycles are' or 'biking is'; 'is a most uh, is becoming, uh, increasingly combo' mixes incorrect adjective forms and nonsense word 'combo' instead of 'common'. Use clear subject 'bicycles' or 'cycling', correct verb 'is becoming', and adjective 'common' or 'popular'. Maintain consistent tense and complete the comparison 'much more popular'. Suggestion: state the idea simply and clearly: 'Cycling is becoming increasingly common' and end with a complete thought 'much more popular now'.