Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with tense consistency, avoid unnecessary fillers, and make sentences more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct minor grammar: say "I had a bike" (past), "when I was around seven" (no colon), and remove repeated words and hesitations.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was around seven because I had poor balance, so they gave me training wheels and encouraged me to practice every weekend until I could ride on my own.

提案: Give a direct, well-structured answer and avoid fillers. Use one clear topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "university" instead of "UNI") and correct phrasing (e.g., "many adults and students use bikes").

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Taiwan. For example, many students and commuters ride bicycles daily because campuses and cities are compact and have good cycling paths, making biking a convenient and affordable way to travel.

× Yeah, I do have one.

✓ Yeah, I had one.

The question asked about having a bike when you were a child (past time), so the response should use past tense. Use 'had' to match the past context. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time frame in the question (use past simple for completed past facts).

× My parents bought me a bike when I was around 7:00 and they tried, uh, tried to let me to ride a bike since I had a really, really bad balance.

✓ My parents bought me a bike when I was around seven and they tried to teach me to ride it because I had a really bad sense of balance.

Several issues: '7:00' is a time, but the intended meaning is age, so use 'seven'. 'Tried to let me to ride' is incorrect: 'let' does not take 'to' and the meaning here is 'teach me' or 'help me learn', so use 'teach me to ride'. 'Ride a bike' repeated is awkward; use 'ride it'. 'Since' can indicate time or cause; 'because' is clearer for cause. Also reduce redundant 'really, really' to 'really'. Suggestion: Use 'teach me to ride it' and 'because' for cause; write numbers under ten as words in formal writing.

× ...we basically ride a bike every day since we have, uh, usually you have a large campus.

✓ ...we basically ride bikes every day because we usually have large campuses.

Mismatch and awkward phrasing: 'a bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally about people in a country. 'Since' is ambiguous for cause; 'because' is clearer. 'We have, uh, usually you have a large campus' mixes pronouns and singular/plural. If referring to universities generally, say 'we usually have large campuses' or 'our universities usually have large campuses'. Suggestion: Keep number agreement consistent and choose clear causal connectors.

× ...not just for the children, umm, for the adult students in the UNI, uh, we basically ride a bike every day...

✓ ...not just for children but also for adult students at university; we basically ride bikes every day...

Awkward article and noun use: 'the children' and 'the adult students' are unnecessary definite forms when speaking generally. 'UNI' should be 'university' or 'universities'. Use parallel structure 'not just X but also Y'. Suggestion: Use general plural nouns without 'the' and avoid abbreviations in speaking tests.