Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, grammatically correct topic sentence in the past tense, then add one or two clear supporting details with linking words. Correct tense mistakes, remove repetition, and use specific reasons (e.g. family preference, safety, cost). Keep it concise (1–3 sentences).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was unsafe. Also, we couldn’t afford to buy one, so I learned to walk and use public transport instead.

提案: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because / so / moreover). Avoid repetition and use accurate vocabulary (e.g. affordable, widespread, prefer). Keep the answer to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and cheaper to run than cars. As a result, many people prefer bikes for daily commuting, especially where car ownership is expensive.

× No, I don't have bike when I was a child because I I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

This sentence mixes present tense ('don't have') with past time reference ('when I was a child'). It also omits the article 'a' before 'bike' and repeats 'I'. Use the past simple 'didn't have' for a past situation and include the indefinite article: 'a bike'. Remove the duplicated word. Suggestion: use 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.'

× So even my family will not alone to ride on bike.

✓ Also, my family wouldn't let me ride a bike alone.

The original has incorrect modal usage and pronoun/word order. 'Will not alone to ride on bike' is ungrammatical. For past habits or permissions, use 'wouldn't let me' or 'didn't allow me'. Use the pronoun 'me' as the object and include the article 'a' before 'bike'. Use 'ride a bike' rather than 'ride on bike'. Suggestion: 'My family wouldn't let me ride a bike alone.'

× So that's why I don't have bike.

✓ So that's why I didn't have a bike.

This sentence refers to a past reason, so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Don't have' is present; change to 'didn't have'. Also include the article 'a' before 'bike'. Suggestion: 'So that's why I didn't have a bike.'

× Yes, in my country bikes are very popular because in my country in my country because in very cheap prices so all are maximum peoples are buying the bikes only.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap, so most people buy bikes.

The original repeats phrases, misorders words, and uses incorrect quantifiers ('maximum peoples'). Simplify: place 'in my country' after the subject or at end, use 'they are cheap' or 'available at low prices', and use 'most people' rather than 'maximum peoples'. Remove redundant repetition. Suggestion: 'Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap, so most people buy them.'

× So because cars are very expensive in in our country so all are preferring bikes only.

✓ Because cars are very expensive in our country, everyone prefers bikes.

Original repeats 'in' and uses awkward phrasing 'all are preferring bikes only.' Use simple present tense 'prefer' for general truths: 'everyone prefers bikes.' Remove redundant 'so' and 'only.' Suggestion: 'Because cars are very expensive in our country, everyone prefers bikes.'