Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your reply is direct and concise, which is good, but it's too short and lacks supporting details. To improve, give a brief topic sentence then one or two specific details (e.g., who gave it to you, what kind it was, how you used it) and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it natural and under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did — I had a small red bicycle that my parents bought me when I was seven. It was a simple single-speed bike, and I used it to ride to my friends’ houses and the park every weekend.

提案: You answered the question but the response is informal and has hesitations and grammatical issues. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, a reason with specific detail, and a short consequence or example, using linking words like 'because' or 'therefore'. Avoid filler words (uh, like) and correct plural and quantifier usage.

例: Not very popular — because our climate is extremely hot for much of the year, many people prefer motorbikes or cars for comfort. Therefore, only a small number of people use bicycles, mainly students or cycling enthusiasts.

× Not that much because, uh, our weather is uh, like more hot.

✓ Not that much because our weather is hotter.

The sentence uses 'more hot' to compare temperature, which is unidiomatic. Use the comparative form 'hotter' for adjectives of one or two syllables. Also remove filler words and unnecessary commas for clarity.

× So actually we don't use more bikes, only few.

✓ So actually we don't use bikes much; only a few people do.

'Don't use more bikes' is unclear and incorrectly uses 'more'. Use 'don't use bikes much' to express low frequency. 'Only few' is incorrect quantifier usage; it should be 'only a few' or 'very few people'. Also add a subject ('people') for clarity.