Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and direct, which is good. To improve, remove hesitation (“Uh”), give a concise topic sentence, and add one short supporting detail (e.g., what kind of bike or a brief memory) using a linking word. Keep it to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I did — I had a small red bicycle with training wheels when I was about six. For example, I used to ride it to the park every afternoon with my friends, and it was my favorite way to spend free time.

提案: This answer is unclear and contains repetition and hesitation. Start with a clear opinion, avoid filler phrases like “actually I don't know,” and support your view with a specific reason or example using a linking word (e.g., “because” or “for example”). Keep sentences concise and natural.

例: Yes, I think bikes are fairly popular among younger people because many students use them to commute to school and college. For example, in my city you can see many students cycling in the morning since it is cheap and convenient.

× Actually I don't know, but I think younger people used used used to bikes maybe.

✓ Actually, I don't know, but I think younger people used to ride bikes, maybe.

The original sentence contains a repeated word 'used used used' and an incorrect structure 'used to bikes'. This is a sentence structure error (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Use 'used to' + base verb to indicate a past habit or common activity: 'used to ride'. Also add a comma after 'Actually' and place 'maybe' at the end for natural word order. Suggestions: remove the repeated words, change 'used to bikes' to 'used to ride bikes', and position 'maybe' at the sentence end for clarity.