Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak in the past tense and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid repetitions and filler words. Use linking words if adding details (e.g., “because,” “so”). Also correct vocabulary: say “bike” not “bag/back” if you mean bicycle, and use “followed me” or “I’ve had it since childhood.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small pink bicycle that my parents bought me for my sixth birthday, and I used it every day to ride around the neighborhood. Because it was very reliable, I kept it for several years and have fond memories of learning to ride it.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use correct vocabulary: say “bikes” and “roads,” and use linking words like “because,” “so,” or “therefore.” Avoid repeating words. Aim for 2–3 sentences with clear grammar (subject-verb agreement) and coherent structure.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my city because there are relatively few cars and many people prefer cycling for short trips. For example, many streets have bike lanes, so commuting by bicycle is convenient, inexpensive, and healthy.

× Yes, I have a pink bag when I I am a child and I I, I pretty like this back which which follow me from childhood, yeah.

✓ Yes, I had a pink bag when I was a child, and I really liked this bag which has followed me since childhood.

Errors: tense misuse (should be past tense 'had' and 'was' because the question asks about childhood) — corresponds to Present/Past tense issues but here corrected under adjective/adverb because of 'pretty like' misuse; repeated words and wrong word choice: 'pretty like' is incorrect English — use 'really liked' or 'quite liked'; spelling 'back' should be 'bag'; incorrect relative clause tense: 'which follow me from childhood' should be 'which has followed me since childhood' to show continued possession from past to present. Suggestions: use past simple for past states ('had','was'), use appropriate adverb ('really' or 'quite') before verb 'liked', correct vocabulary ('bag'), and use present perfect 'has followed' with 'since' to indicate action from past to present.

× And yes, I think so, because our city is not many cars and many people like back on the road and it's so. Convenient, convenient, and I like it.

✓ Yes, I think so, because there are not many cars in our city and many people like to ride bikes on the road; it is very convenient, and I like it.

Errors: incorrect sentence structure and pronoun/use of 'our city is not many cars' — should use existential 'there are' with plural noun (Grammar Problem Type 3 'There be issue' and 27 'Subject-verb agreement'); 'like back' is wrong pronoun/word choice — should be 'like to ride bikes' or 'like biking'; redundant and fragmented sentences ('it's so. Convenient, convenient') need smoothing. Suggestions: use 'there are not many cars' to state existence, include preposition 'in' for location ('in our city'), use infinitive 'like to ride' or gerund 'like riding', combine fragments into fluent sentence and use 'very convenient' for emphasis.