Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and verb tense consistency, make the response more concise and natural, and add a brief specific detail. Use past tense for childhood and correct subject-verb agreement. For example, begin with a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting details linked with a connector.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I only used it occasionally because my parents were very strict about safety, so they didn't let me ride far from home.

提案: Make sentences grammatically correct and avoid repetition. Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Provide one concrete example to support your point.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people cycle to work or school in the morning to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

× Yes, when I am a child I had a bike, but it's just quite a while because my mom and dad is so strict that I cannot ride it.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike, but that was a long time ago because my mom and dad were so strict that I could not ride it.

Errors: 'when I am a child' uses present tense instead of past; 'it's just quite a while' is ungrammatical and unclear (use 'that was a long time ago'); 'my mom and dad is' has subject-verb agreement error (plural subject needs 'were' in past); 'I cannot ride it' should match past context ('could not'). Suggestions: Use past tense consistently for past events: 'when I was a child', replace vague phrase with 'that was a long time ago', change 'is' to 'were' and 'cannot' to 'could not' to reflect past time.

× A bicycle is quite common in our country. Special they use it as a transportation's mode of transportation when going to work or going to school.

✓ Bicycles are quite common in our country. People often use them as a mode of transportation when going to work or school.

Errors: First sentence uses singular 'A bicycle' to state a general fact — use plural or generic 'Bicycles' for general statements (singular/plural issue). The second sentence: 'Special' is incorrect word choice; 'transportation's mode of transportation' is redundant and incorrectly formed. Also pronoun use 'they' is vague. Suggestions: Use plural 'Bicycles' for general facts, use 'People often use them' for clarity, and 'a mode of transportation' (not redundant) or simply 'to travel to work or school.'