Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, use correct tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), give one or two specific supporting details, and link them coherently. Correct common errors: use past tense for childhood events, avoid filler words, and replace vague phrases with concrete information.

例: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father taught me to ride it when I was about seven, and I remember falling off once and cutting my knee, which made me more careful afterward. Because of that experience, I grew to enjoy cycling and still like riding a bike for fun.

提案: Answer directly, organize reasons with linking words, and use clearer vocabulary. Give one main reason with a specific example and show consequence. Avoid hesitation and redundant phrases.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because public transport is limited in many areas. Consequently, many families teach their children to ride early; for example, I learned at age eight so I could travel short distances and later found it easier to learn to ride a motorbike.

× Yes, I do have a buy one.

✓ Yes, I did have one when I was a child.

The original sentence has sentence structure errors and wrong word choice ('buy' instead of 'bought' or 'one'). The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so use past tense 'did have' or simply 'had'. Also use 'one' to refer to 'a bike' or say 'a bike'. Suggestion: say 'Yes, I did have one' or 'Yes, I had a bike.'

× I was a child, my father, my father, uh, he taught me how to ride a bike and I fall off of my bike one time and it was really painful.

✓ When I was a child, my father taught me how to ride a bike, and I fell off my bike one time; it was really painful.

Multiple tense and structure issues: redundant phrase 'my father' repeated, and the verb 'fall' is present instead of past 'fell' which is required because the rest of the sentence is in the past. Also improve punctuation and remove repetition. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and avoid repetition: 'When I was a child, my father taught me... and I fell off my bike once.'

× This day I really love.

✓ To this day, I really love it.

The original lacks proper structure and object. 'This day I really love' is incorrect; use the fixed expression 'to this day' to indicate continuation and include the object 'it' referring to riding bikes. Suggestion: 'To this day, I really love riding a bike' or 'To this day, I really love it.'

× I really like having a bike.

✓ I really like having a bike.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It fits the present simple to express a general liking. No change needed.

× Yes, I yes, I think so because umm, my country doesn't have that much uh, that's my popular transportation.

✓ Yes, I think so because in my country there is not that much public transportation,

Several issues: repetition 'Yes, I yes, I', and incorrect phrase 'doesn't have that much' needs an object; likely 'public transportation' was intended. Also 'that's my popular transportation' is ungrammatical. Use 'there is not much public transportation' for general present situation. Suggestion: 'Yes, I think so because in my country there is not much public transportation.'

× That's why since we were young, we have to learn how to ride a bike.

✓ That's why, since we were young, we had to learn how to ride a bike.

Tense inconsistency: 'since we were young' refers to past time, so 'have to' should be 'had to' for past obligation. Alternatively, if speaking generally from childhood to now, use present perfect: 'we have had to learn.' Suggestion: match the tense: 'we had to learn' or 'we have had to learn.'

× So it will help us, it will really help us to learn how to ride motorbike also.

✓ So it helps us; it also really helps us learn how to ride a motorbike.

Tense and word order: 'will help' implies future, but context describes general benefit—use present 'helps'. Also use 'a motorbike' and simpler structure: 'it also helps us learn how to ride a motorbike.' Suggestion: use present simple for general facts and correct noun phrase 'a motorbike'.