Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, mạch lạc và chính xác về thời gian và mục đích. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp (ví dụ “trial”, “default performance”, “yielded” không đúng ngữ cảnh). Sử dụng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó thêm 1-2 câu chi tiết cụ thể (khi nào, ai, mục đích). Giữ không quá 5 câu.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was about eight years old and I used it mainly to ride to school and to go out with my friends. It was a simple blue bicycle, and I rode it almost every day during the summer.

提案: Bạn cần diễn đạt rõ ràng, tránh ngôn ngữ lúng túng và câu không đúng cấu trúc. Không sử dụng từ miêu tả sai (ví dụ “drunk person” không phù hợp) và nên nêu lý do cụ thể vì sao xe đạp phổ biến (kinh tế, tiện lợi, môi trường). Dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, because, and). Giữ 2-3 câu ngắn gọn, chính xác.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. They are affordable and practical for many people, especially students and older adults, so many people use them to commute, exercise, or meet friends. For example, I often see people riding bicycles to school and local markets.

× Yes, definitely when it was a trial.

✓ Yes, definitely when I was learning to ride.

The original sentence has unclear structure and wrong word choice ('trial'). Use a clear subject and verb: 'I was learning to ride' matches the context of having a bike as a child and fixes sentence structure and vocabulary.

× I have a default performance and a yielded for hang out with friends and go to my school.

✓ I used it to hang out with friends and to go to school.

The original sentence uses incorrect and unclear words ('default performance', 'yielded') and wrong tense ('have'). Use past tense 'used' because question refers to childhood. Simplify structure: 'used it to...' and parallel infinitives 'to hang out' and 'to go'.

× Yes, MMM, the bikes are very popular in the country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

Sentence is mostly correct but 'the bikes' and 'in the country' are slightly awkward; use 'bikes' and 'my country' for natural speech. No verb agreement error here, but clarity improved.

× It's uh, poor the old person and also for drunk person as me.

✓ They are useful for older people and also for people who are drunk, like me.

Original uses incorrect adjective 'poor' and wrong noun forms. Use 'useful' to express purpose and plural nouns 'people'. 'Like me' clarifies personal reference. Also match plural subject 'they'.

× We use it for exercise, hang out with friends, go to school and uh, do each other.

✓ We use them for exercise, hanging out with friends, going to school and visiting each other.

Parallelism and correct verb forms are needed. Use gerunds after 'for': 'for exercise, hanging out...' Also 'do each other' is incorrect; likely intended 'visit each other'. Match plural 'them' for bikes.