Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản, câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp với một câu chủ đề, rồi giải thích lý do cụ thể bằng một hoặc hai câu bổ sung. Sử dụng thì quá khứ đơn cho hành động trong quá khứ, ví dụ: 'I didn't have a bike because I was afraid of falling.' Thêm liên từ đơn giản như 'because' để nối câu, và tránh từ không chuẩn như 'gonna' hoặc 'no need'.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of falling and getting hurt. My parents thought it was safer not to buy one for me, so I learned to enjoy walking and public transportation instead.

提案: Cần cải thiện động từ chia đúng thì và số nhiều/ít, dùng từ vựng chính xác và câu mạch lạc. Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + brief reason), rồi nêu ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ như 'very, very' và sử dụng danh từ đúng (e.g. 'bikes' thay vì 'buys'). Sử dụng liên từ như 'for example' hoặc 'for instance' để đưa dẫn chứng cụ thể.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, I often see lots of bikes parked outside shopping centres and my brother has been riding his bike to work for several years.

× No gonna try.

✓ No, I wasn't going to try.

The original lacks a subject and auxiliary verb, and uses informal contraction 'gonna' incorrectly. Use past continuous/future-in-past structure 'wasn't going to' to match past-tense context and include subject 'I'. Example improvement: 'No, I wasn't going to try.'

× I didn't a bike because I scared.

✓ I didn't have a bike because I was scared.

Missing main verb 'have' after 'didn't' and missing auxiliary 'was' for the adjective 'scared'. In past tense, use 'didn't have' for possession and 'was scared' for state. Improvement: include the verb 'have' and 'was'. 'I didn't have a bike because I was scared.'

× I scared to pain so I didn't no need.

✓ I was afraid of getting hurt, so I didn't need one.

Pronoun and adjective misuse: 'scared' should be 'was afraid' (passive/state) and 'to pain' is incorrect; use 'of getting hurt'. 'I didn't no need' is a double negative and missing object; use 'didn't need one'. Improve clarity and correct negatives.

× Yes, when I goes to cools our store shopping centres, I see very, very, very much buys and my brother used to buy very, very long time because.

✓ Yes, when I go to our shops and shopping centres, I see a lot of buyers, and my brother used to buy for a very long time.

Multiple errors: 'goes' should be 'go' because subject 'I' requires base form; 'cools' is incorrect word choice—use 'our shops' or 'stores'; 'very, very, very much buys' is ungrammatical—use 'a lot of buyers' or 'many people buying'; 'used to buy very, very long time' should be 'used to buy for a very long time' to show duration. Also remove redundant filler 'because' or complete the clause. Improve subject-verb agreement, word choice, and noun phrases.