Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Start with a topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. For example, use past simple (“I had”) for childhood facts and add a short reason or memory.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. In fact, I got it for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it to the park every afternoon. It was small and bright red, which made it easy to spot.

提案: Answer directly with correct tense and clearer linking words, then give a specific reason or example. Use present simple for general truths ("are popular"), and link ideas with words like "because", "so", or "therefore". Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are often faster than cars in the city. For example, many people cycle to work to avoid traffic jams, and bicycle-sharing schemes in major cities are widely used.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was kid at the time kids bike I have.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The response refers to a past situation ('when you were a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Have' (present) is incorrect; use 'had' (past). Also 'kid' should be the noun 'a child' and needs the article 'a'. Remove redundant fragments ('at the time kids bike I have') to make a clear sentence. Suggestion: use 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× Yes, I thought a bikes are very popular in my country because everyone use a bike because of in my country very much traffic jams issues so that everyone used bike.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because everyone uses a bike due to many traffic jams, so many people choose to ride bikes.

Multiple issues apply but per instructions only address those in the list: singular/plural and subject-verb agreement (use 'bikes' plural instead of 'a bikes'), and correct pronoun/verb forms. 'A bikes' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a'. Use 'bikes' to refer generally. 'Everyone' is singular and requires 'uses' (third person singular) — this touches subject-verb agreement (ID 27) and third person singular (ID 2), but primary plural error fixed here. Also improve wording: 'because of in my country very much traffic jams issues' is ungrammatical—simplify to 'due to many traffic jams'. Use 'many people' or 'everyone' consistently and 'choose to ride bikes' or 'use bikes'. Suggestion: 'I think bikes are very popular... because everyone uses a bike due to many traffic jams.'