Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ตอบได้ตรงประเด็นและมีความเป็นธรรมชาติ แต่ควรกระชับให้สั้นลง (ไม่เกิน 5 ประโยค) ลดการใช้คำซ้ำ เช่น “at that time” และเพิ่มรายละเอียดที่เฉพาะเจาะจงมากขึ้น เช่น ลักษณะจักรยานหรือกิจกรรมที่ทำกับจักรยาน ใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น “because”, “so”, “when”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about seven. My parents bought a small red bicycle with training wheels for me because I had been asking for one. I remember riding it every afternoon in the park near our house, which made me very happy. That memory is still special to me.

提案: คำตอบชัดเจนแต่ซ้ำและมีคำพูดเติม (fillers) ควรยกตัวอย่างหรือสาเหตุที่เฉพาะ เช่น ปัจจัยเรื่องสภาพอากาศ ระบบขนส่ง หรือความปลอดภัย ใช้ linking words ให้เชื่อมเหตุผล เช่น “therefore”, “for example”, “due to” และหลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำ เช่น “not really”

例: Bikes are not very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for commuting in traffic. For example, poor cycling infrastructure and hot weather make cycling less practical, so many choose motorbikes or cars instead.

× My parents bought it for me and at that time I was like 7 years old asking for a bike.

✓ My parents bought it for me. At that time I was about seven years old and had been asking for a bike.

The original sentence mixes informal phrasing and tense/structure issues. Use past simple for 'bought' (correct) and then separate into two sentences. Use 'was about seven years old' instead of 'was like 7 years old' for formality and correct number spelling. Use 'had been asking' (past perfect continuous) to show the prior/requesting action leading up to the purchase, or 'had asked' if simple past perfect preferred. Suggestion: split into clearer sentences and use past perfect to indicate the earlier action. Note: kept explanation in English per instruction.

× They went to the shop and bought it for me.

✓ They went to the shop and bought it for me.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses past simple appropriately for sequential actions (went, bought). No change needed.

× Not really.

✓ Not really.

Short answer 'Not really' is acceptable and matches the examiner's question about general popularity; no tense or grammatical error.

× I think people tend to use motorbikes rather than, uh, using the bike, even in the city or urban areas.

✓ I think people tend to use motorbikes rather than bikes, even in cities or urban areas.

Compare structures: after 'rather than' you should use a parallel form. Either 'use motorbikes rather than use bikes' or more naturally 'use motorbikes rather than bikes.' Avoid mixing 'use' with 'using'. Also replace 'the bike' with 'bikes' to generalize and use plural for general statements. Use 'cities' plural when speaking generally. Suggestion: keep parallel forms and consistent pluralization for general statements.

× Because of that, people see that it's more convenient than using the bike, so it's not really popular here.

✓ Because of that, people find motorbikes more convenient than bikes, so bikes are not really popular here.

Original sentence uses awkward phrasing 'people see that it's more convenient than using the bike' and unclear pronoun reference 'it.' Replace with 'people find motorbikes more convenient than bikes' for clarity and parallel structure. Also change 'it's not really popular here' to 'bikes are not really popular here' to match the plural subject and avoid ambiguous 'it.' Use plural 'bikes' since discussing general popularity.