Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 発音の詰まりや不要な「uh」「I, I」の繰り返しを減らし、文を明確に区切る練習をしてください。また、簡潔な主題文の後に1〜2の具体的詳細（例：年齢、どこで乗ったか、どのくらい練習したか）を加えると自然で効果的です。接続詞（e.g. and, so, because）を使って文を滑らかに繋ぎ、語彙は「practiced riding」や「my mother taught me」など自然な表現を使いましょう。

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My mother taught me to ride it when I was five, and I practiced every day after school so I became quite confident.

提案: 繰り返しや無意味なフィラー（uh, umm）を減らしましょう。まず簡潔な主題文で答え（Yes, they are popular.）を述べ、その後に具体例（誰が使うか、どんな状況で使われるか）と統計的または個人的観察を1〜2文で付け加えると良いです。文法に注意して動詞の一致（a lot of students use）や語句の選択（commonly used rather than “big grades”）を正しく使ってください。

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Japan. Many high school students use them to commute to school, and adults often ride bikes for short trips to the shops because they are convenient and cheap.

× Yes, I had a bike when I, I was a child and my, uh, my mother brought me to bike and I, I was always practicing the bike every day.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and my mother bought me the bike. I practiced riding it every day.

The sentence has several past-tense and verb-choice errors. 'Brought me to bike' is incorrect: 'brought' means to carry something to a place, while 'bought' (past of 'buy') correctly indicates purchasing. Also, 'practicing the bike' is wrong because we 'practice riding' or 'ride' a bike; use 'practiced riding it' or 'rode it every day' to express habitual past action. Remove repeated filler words and add commas for clarity. Suggestions: use correct past verbs (bought, practiced/rode) and the verb phrase 'ride a bike' or 'ride it'.

× Yes uh, umm, the big grades are popular uh, in Japan, in my country, Japan, uh, uh, every, uh, every high school, uh, a lot of students uh, uses, use bikes and uh adults also use them uh, to.

✓ Yes, in Japan many students in high school use bikes, and adults also use them.

The original sentence mixes forms and has subject-verb agreement issues. 'A lot of students uses' is incorrect because 'students' is plural and requires the base verb 'use' (subject-verb agreement issue relates to present tense). Also 'the big grades are popular' is unclear and likely incorrect; simplified to 'many students in high school'. The trailing 'to' is unnecessary. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual facts (use), ensure plural subjects take base verb form, and remove fillers for clarity.