Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good direct response with relevant details and a clear structure. To improve further, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy, add a linking word for coherence, and include one concrete specific detail (e.g., age or a memorable place) to make the answer more vivid. Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes — I did. My twin sister and I started riding when we were about six, and we often biked to the nearby park every afternoon. Because we had few restrictions, it became our favorite way to explore the neighborhood and be outdoors.

提案: Direct answer is given but sentence is long and slightly repetitive. Improve coherence by using linking words (e.g., however, although) and add a specific comparison or statistic to support the claim. Break into two sentences: a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail with an example of your city.

例: Generally, bikes are not very popular across my country. However, in my city they are common because we have many parks and safe sidewalks, so people often cycle for exercise or short trips.

× Yes, I did. My twin sister and I used to ride bikes all the time around the neighborhood and to the park, often without supervision.

✓ Yes, I did. My twin sister and I used to ride our bikes all the time around the neighborhood and to the park, often without supervision.

Grammar problem type ID:1 Singular and plural issue. The sentence omits the possessive determiner 'our' before 'bikes.' Without it, 'ride bikes' is not ungrammatical, but specifying 'our bikes' is more natural and clear when referencing ownership by 'my twin sister and I.' Suggestion: include appropriate possessive determiner (my/our/their) when indicating possession, e.g., 'our bikes.'

× Bikes are not that popular in my country, but in my city it is because I live in a city with a lot of parks and a decent sidewalk where you could bike by yourself without any harm or any inconvenience, so it's good.

✓ Bikes are not that popular in my country, but they are in my city because I live in a city with a lot of parks and decent sidewalks where you can ride a bike by yourself without any harm or inconvenience, so it is good.

Grammar problem type ID:11 Incorrect use of prepositions and 2 Third person singular issue and 1 Singular and plural issue. Multiple problems: 1) Pronoun/reference: 'in my city it is' is unclear; replace with 'they are' referring to 'bikes' (subject-verb agreement/third person plural). 2) 'a decent sidewalk' should be plural 'decent sidewalks' to match general statement, and 'where you could bike' is better as present modal 'you can ride a bike' to match general fact. 3) 'any harm or any inconvenience' is redundant; use 'harm or inconvenience.' Suggestions: ensure pronouns agree in number with antecedents, match verb forms to general truths (use present tense/modal 'can'), use plural nouns for general conditions, and avoid redundant 'any.'