Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use correct tense and clearer structure. Start with a direct topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep to maximum 3–4 short sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was inexpensive, so my parents could afford to buy one for me. As a result, I rode it to school and to visit friends almost every day.

提案: Answer the question directly about popularity, then give specific reasons and use linking words. Correct grammar (use present tense for current popularity) and avoid repeating the same point twice.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Because they are affordable and convenient, many families buy them for their children. For example, I often see groups of kids cycling to school in my neighborhood.

× I do have a bike when I was a child because it's pretty affordable.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child because it was pretty affordable.

The sentence mixes present tense ('do have') with past time reference ('when I was a child'). Use past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Also change 'it's' to 'it was' for the same reason. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense when talking about past situations.

× In my opinion it is very affordable because a lot of children my age at that time use it.

✓ In my opinion it was very affordable because a lot of children my age at that time used it.

The sentence expresses an opinion about the past ('at that time'), but uses present tense verbs ('is', 'use'). Change them to past tense ('was', 'used') to be consistent with the past time reference. Also add a comma after 'In my opinion' for natural phrasing (optional).