Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (use past tense consistently), make the response more natural and slightly expand with one specific detail. Keep it within 2–4 sentences. Use a clear topic sentence then a supporting detail with a linking word.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink and white, and I used to ride it to my friend’s house every afternoon, so I have many happy memories of cycling around the neighborhood.

提案: Make the sentence grammatically correct and more specific. Start with a clear opinion, then give a reason or example using a linking word (e.g., however, because). Avoid vague phrasing and correct relative clause use.

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country; however, cyclists often face a lack of respect on the roads because many drivers do not give them enough space, which can make cycling unsafe.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and it was pink and white.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was pink and white.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time marker 'when I was a child', causing a tense inconsistency. Use past simple 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use past tense verbs for actions or states that occurred in the past (e.g., 'I had a bike').

× Actually they are popular, but generally people don't show respect who using bikes.

✓ Actually bicycles are popular, but generally people don't show respect to those who use bikes.

There are multiple issues: the pronoun and relative clause are incorrect ('who using bikes' is ungrammatical). Use 'those who use bikes' or 'people who use bikes' for the relative clause, and include the preposition 'to' after 'show respect'. Also 'they' is vague—'bicycles' is clearer. Suggestions: use 'those who' + base verb ('use') for habits, and include necessary prepositions ('show respect to someone').