Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, more concise, and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like “uh” and correct tense and article errors (e.g., “I had a bike,” “a four‑wheeled bike”).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. The first one was a pink, four‑wheeled bike, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood. Because it was sturdy and easy to balance, I felt confident exploring nearby parks.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence, give specific examples and use linking words to connect ideas. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., “more common than in the past,” “younger generations,” “careful about their health”). Try to limit to 2–3 sentences with precise reasons or examples.

例: Yes, I think bikes are more popular in my country than before. For example, I often see many people cycling in my neighborhood and along the seaside, especially younger generations who cycle to stay fit and avoid traffic.

× I have bike when I was a child

✓ I had a bike when I was a child

Tense consistency error: the sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time expression 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Also include the article 'a' before 'bike'. Suggestion: Use past tense for events in the past and include necessary articles (I had a bike when I was a child).

× the first one was pink and with four still uh, four wheel

✓ The first one was pink and had four wheels

Article and noun number errors: 'the first one' needs initial capitalisation only in transcription; more importantly, 'with four still uh, four wheel' is incorrect. Use 'had' to describe possession and plural 'wheels' for more than one. Suggestion: Say 'The first one was pink and had four wheels.'

× and also I was really enjoy to ride a bike

✓ and I really enjoyed riding a bike

Verb form error: 'was really enjoy' incorrectly combines past continuous 'was' with base verb 'enjoy'. Use past simple 'enjoyed' or 'was really enjoying'. After verbs like 'enjoy', use gerund form 'riding' rather than 'to ride'. Suggestion: Use 'I really enjoyed riding a bike' for past habit.

× because in my opinion it's more common than the past

✓ because in my opinion it is more common than in the past

Comparative time reference: missing preposition 'in' before 'the past' makes the comparison incomplete. Use 'in the past' to refer to earlier times. Suggestion: 'it is more common than in the past.'

× I can see the people around my neighborhood and also on the seaside there is new generations who are be careful their health more than the past

✓ I can see people around my neighborhood and at the seaside; the new generations are more careful about their health than in the past

Multiple issues: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'people' and 'new generations'; subject-verb agreement and verb form ('there is new generations' should be 'the new generations are' or simply 'new generations are'); incorrect phrase 'who are be careful their health' should be 'are more careful about their health'; comparative 'than the past' should be 'than in the past'. Suggestions: Remove unnecessary articles, use plural verb agreement, use 'careful about' and compare with 'in the past'.