Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar/word choice; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., "play" or "ride around puddles" instead of "puddle"). Avoid repetition and keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a pink bike when I was a child. It had training wheels because I was still learning to ride, and I used to ride it around puddles in the park near my house almost every afternoon.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence then add a specific reason or example using a linking word. Fix tense consistency and complete your sentence. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "common" → "very popular"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, most children grow up with a bike because they are affordable and useful for short trips around the neighborhood.

× It had four wheels for a training 'cause I didn't know how to ride it yet.

✓ It had four training wheels because I didn't know how to ride it yet.

The phrase 'for a training' is incorrect; use the noun 'training wheels' to describe extra small wheels used for learning to ride. Also replace informal ' 'cause' with 'because' for correctness. Suggestion: say 'training wheels' and use 'because' in formal responses.

× I also puddle with it every.

✓ I also played with it every day.

'Puddle with' is incorrect verb usage; likely intended 'played' or 'pedaled'. The sentence is incomplete missing an object/time: 'every' should be 'every day'. Suggestion: use correct verb ('played with it', 'rode it') and complete the frequency expression ('every day').

× I used to puddle with it in the park near my house almost every afternoon.

✓ I used to play with it in the park near my house almost every afternoon.

The verb 'puddle' is not correct in this context; 'used to' indicates past habitual action and should be followed by a base verb like 'play' or 'ride'. Suggestion: use 'play' or 'ride' depending on intended meaning.

× Yes, it's a common thing in our country.

✓ Yes, bicycles are common in my country.

The vague pronoun 'it' and phrase 'a common thing' are imprecise. The question asks about 'bikes', so use the plural noun 'bicycles' or 'bikes' and match the subject-verb number. Suggestion: refer directly to 'bikes' and use plural agreement.

× Basically every child had it as a.

✓ Basically every child has one.

Tense and structure are awkward: the examiner's question is general, so present simple 'has' fits better than past 'had'. 'Had it as a' is incomplete; use 'has one' to refer to a bike. Suggestion: use present simple for general statements and complete the noun phrase ('one' meaning 'a bike').